All Comments on 'The Devil’s Bitch'

As if in a trance they would begin a slow dance

Her hand still conducting his throbbing erect wand

close to an original thought

seriously you are not getting paid by the word, nor the rhyme

what part of edit, do you not understand? what part of think?

how much stuff can you generate? why? your fan club, QQ?

I wrote better stuff when I was sixteen, even then, I knew it was crap

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But your fabulous "deft, tugging wangle" did made me smile and think I want one of those.

I write what comes...... I am humbled that there are those among us that are so superior.....QQ

now that you have cum to town. Yes 1201 does have a point, you might sharpen the poem on the Queen's teeth, its a long one with cock and balls, i.e. a mouthful, but I don't think crap is a kind assessment. Fantasy poems with a horror element are fun to read. You might rework this one and end up with a really beautiful reser-erection.The first two stanza's are fine. Often our first lines are the best. The last two stanza are nice but not as good as the first two. See what can be done in between. You have a wonderful imagination, here not so much original but bitting in the final analysis. Not every first draft or tenth will be representative of your best effort, as I was told once by a similar "bulging breasted" vixen at Toto's Circus Room, "You can't really be considered a whore until you have done it over a hundred times."

I always appreciate your constructive insights.... Thanks again Q.Q.