All Comments on 'The Fly'

enigmatic last line , GM :" as three of us took to water ...." : maybe my subconscious is gettin' influenced by the "Power" of 3 !

what he said

five for the fly

Please tell me this was on the threads :)

I'm bothered by the line 'Still I couldn't let that fly'

and I wonder if the intent is to be bothered by the unfinished line

changing let to leave would alleviate the unfinished feel so I sit here pondering, re-reading, still undecided if it was intentional to further the feel of the memories of a past relationship that has the person in the tub crying, vainly trying, to save the poor doomed fly.

Yes, Trix, it was on the threads on PF&D, but this is an edited version. The change was simple word play with the word "fly."

GM, this is a really touching poem, in many ways. I always enjoy your work and congrats on the recognition!

~m