All Comments on 'The Last Breath'

Very well done....good parallels between 'death' and other concepts :)

the last line. You had something beautiful going on the creeped it up a little bit. BUT, the concept is good and I did have fun reading it

:) maria

Okay, spooky. :S

I'm going back to my pink fluffy girlieness now!

There’s a sweetness in life,

A deep seated pleasure to be had,

Soft gentle kisses can they be bad.

There’s a peace in this life,

Of touches content,

Filling your soul you cannot resent.

There’s a calm in this life,

Like your touch after sex,

Hold him so tight don't make him your ex.

There's a harmony in life,

With no final note,

Friendship and love all to emote.

There’s a bliss in this life,

As quietly you sleep,

She is quit young and soft as a sheep

I think equating death to sex with an ex was masterly