All Comments on 'The smile of breaking'

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very well done ! you have a great talent for perspective

and I think the addition of "psychobabble" does help clarify for me what is happening in the poem. I might have taken some poetic license and written it as "psycho babble" with that space there to make the point even stronger, but that's a matter of preference, perhaps.

It's pretty shocking stuff, almost too shocking to read, but in a poem that's a very good thing imo.

I'm still unclear on the title and I think that's the only weak link in the poem. The title doesn't say anything meaningful to me about what follows.

Just my opinion, of course, and like I said you are a natural!

still object to

Psychobabble

5ed

as butters suggested, however it went of into the realms of truly macarbe and I doubt that it would have been accepted as I had changed it to. because it was so personal I had a lot of trouble trying to edit it down, I sat on it for a couple of days but just couldn't touch it. it seemed complete to me. Please do no take that as indicative to me no listening to critique, but more that I didn't know what else to do with this poem

A broken jaw that bad you can't smile.