All Comments on 'The Trickster'

My life goes by a little faster than this so I'm probably

older than you. This was a cool read for me. I would

drop the last line and call it done.

The last line weakens the work.

"Slides by with a wink

Time is a trickster

Leaving all to think

Dreams of tomorrow

In the lake do they sink."

Why not try something like "are gone in a blink." or maybe switch "blink" and "wink"?

Even BEFORE reading the comments, I really didn't get the last line. It doesn't seem to relate well to the rest of the poem. Otherwise, one of your most compelling offerings!