All Comments on 'The Trickster'

Even BEFORE reading the comments, I really didn't get the last line. It doesn't seem to relate well to the rest of the poem. Otherwise, one of your most compelling offerings!

The last line weakens the work.

"Slides by with a wink

Time is a trickster

Leaving all to think

Dreams of tomorrow

In the lake do they sink."

Why not try something like "are gone in a blink." or maybe switch "blink" and "wink"?

My life goes by a little faster than this so I'm probably

older than you. This was a cool read for me. I would

drop the last line and call it done.