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small mistake here:

I once I sang to you this unwritten music

nice

'I once I sang to you this unwritten music'

It certainly looks like a mistake but the concrete sound of that line rings better with the mistake. Like a painter's dawb on a canvas, sometimes the mistake makes for an interesting resonance.

I like this poem.

b'brig

Lovely poetry,

Thanks.

~ J

hmmm I just meant that I wrote the music, the lyrics were in a book and I made up the tune. I thought that was important because no one else could have sung it to him, it had to be my voice he heard

I was struggling how to put it down

I guess I could say music that had yet to be written

every way I tried it came out so bulky

thanks for the comments! I will work on that line a bit more

~Jennifer

Minor errors. I got the drift.

I'm really enjoying your poetry. Keep up the good work.

I, too, paused at that line thinking it was perhaps a type-o, but then reading it again, I feel it is the perfect flaw {if it ever WAS a mistake} and I would not change a thing. The meaning of the poem was flawless and that's all that ever matters to Me. Cherished motherly visions were felt by this another motherly woman and I thank you for sharing such a beautiful piece today, as <smile>

Mommy Vixxx

my brain did not even pick up the extra I, typo indeed, thanks for pointing it out

as

Your poem has been mentioned in Monday's New Poems Reviews.

I love a poetic series

where we going next MA'

I like Gun Powder river

Excellent, as always!