All Comments on 'To Her Girls'

There a good poem here but you have a penchant for spoiling it by wanting to be seen as a clever intellectual. Never complicate, always simplify.

outside doesnt count. TK U MLJ LV NV

I think there's a good poem here trying to get out. The semi-form is a problem, for one thing. The rhyme scheme seems a bit haphazard at times and several of the end words seem forced to fit a desired rhyme. I think it would be a stronger poem in free verse, but that's just my opinion.

Where's the closing quote?

Not bad, though. Far more interesting than most of what we see here.