All Comments on 'Valentine Elegy'

a little over florid

I think 1201's comment is correct, but it's still a five.

......florid is just fine, it seems to be your style. Valentine is often celebrated in floridity so, to me, it's appropriate here.

Your poem meanders into prose in the final verse and the whole could be pruned and tightened but for a start it's a nice effort.

Tess

I'm not an expert, but the meandering didn't bother me as much. Just keep going and come to the poetry forum. Many help and offer techniques to improve.

And in wicked need of a violent edit but you can write, you just need to tighten your game a bit. Poetry is compressed, every word should lift its own weight. Decorative flourishes are just that. Ask yourself, does this word contribute to the exact meaning of what I am writing or is this just pretty sounding?