All Comments on 'Virginity Vanquished'

I think there's an actual solid poem in this jumble of alliteration. You'd have to pare many lines and forget the fun word searches. I love alliteration, but you're sort of past heavy handed with it here and in all the poems I've read from you. If you'd like real feedback on this poem, I'd suggest take it to the message board, but they're kinda babies over there when it comes to commenting on the work of others. If you email me via my feeback I'd be glad to go over the poem with you.