by Oldbear63
Am working my way (slowly) through your poems. Like the style & will comment more when I have read more.
This could be expanded into a very fine prose story. As it is, it has more depth of plot and character than 98% of the stories. Different limitations would apply in achieving flow, characterisation and shape.
Downside is that it would fit into 'Loving Wives' where the comments can be horrible in the extreme.
You have a wonderful way with words, but you couldn't say anything nicer than that!