All Comments on 'Wanna Shower?'

Definitely erotic with a touch a humor at the end. That's how I took it, anyway. I like it a lot.

I hope you don't mind me saying that some of the stanzas weren't complete sentences, and I think you should've added to them to make them complete. Also, some of the punctuation caused me to stumble a bit.

It's hard for me to lower a score without an explanation. I hope it is helpful to you.

Sincerely, saldne

you have unfinished sentences, your grammer and punctuation are terrible and as for the subject matter well it's all been done before. I would strongly recomened an editor!

great imagery RhymeFairy and did I tell you that it was great to have you back?

Hi ya peeps~!

Yes, Saldne I appreciate the comment and the honesty~! *Smiles*

Neo~ You so Rock~!! *Grins*

I am over-all Happy with this submission. Sometimes one works on a poem, and it takes over. That is what happened in this case. It would not leave me be. So I had to purge. To me, that was submitting, so I could get the poem *out* of my system. Please believe me when I say, I really did edit..play..and work on this one like a lil demon.

Thank you to all who post, good or bad... Thats why we are here...*Huggs to ya'll*~

RhymeFairy~

I like 'rain closet' poetry and dont fret the grammar police, they can not help themselves. Remember, we don't write for numbers, we write for enjoyment. so they can scratch at your literary creation with trying to teach you to be better by lowering your rating, it's a brain thing (*_*) like neo said, glad to have ya back,

It got me to the same place that you took yourself, but I was sitting down and didn't fall *giggle. Absolutely sizzlin!

Yes...that's my kinda shower as well....

~Honey

I'm amazed, all the time, at the talent that makes up the body of Literotica. And what a body it is! This piece is another example of that talent. The imagery is amazing, the wording is exotic, and the more I read, the faster my heart began to beat.

This poem made me squirm.....and squirm.......and squirm! ~ Lonelypoet

Well done. Now THAT'S erotic poetry! ;)

You slipped. You slipped and my ass hurt. I couldn't go to 100 because I think I might have a bruised butt.

Seriously, I really liked, your style loses me in places but this really drew me in.

Now that's hot! Sensual and erotic, quite a strong scene of playful fingers teasing center of pleasure, lost in a world of fantastic music most kind