All Comments on 'We move as one, for all eternity'

that was different, rather well done. 5

a prior comment. What 1201 said, plus I add this,,,

a heavenly as in an earthly bed:

in the above line, should a be an?

I liked your rhythm, your rhyme was pretty good, I enjoyed it, it made me smile, thinking of the situation.

~ maria

needing never to part. TK U MLJ LV NV