All Comments on 'Weakness'

enjoyable to read. I feel the intensity of the emotions and conflicting need for sexual satisfaction versus close companionship. I think they both are truly one in close relationships, though, so conflict/companionship are actually a singularity, combining two into one in the joy that is having a soul mate. This poem reads as two separate things, or a duality. My brain is too sleepy, so this may make absolutely no sense. You get a five. Oh, some neat lines 'curl of your body' and 'where orgasms are candy'. Good stuff.

the opener (pardon the pun) is a good one, sets the tone. "at that focal point" unintentional laughter, not your fault. The follow though on this, makes me want to look (well...) at your other work.

Well done.

There is an introspective vulnerability to the narrator's voice that enhances the poignancy of the poem and gives it a palpable depth of emotion.

That's why I liked it.

My only quibble is with the next to last stanza. I don't think shirtsleeves and ties works. Just don't see who would ever think about that, even when not thinking. Other than that, which is totally minor - very nice.

Here, less is more, and the simplicity really brings something earnest.