All Comments on 'What Men Want'

I liked it even more once I'd copied it and doubled up the lines. It has nice ideas and progression.

I have only read one poem on Literotica where the very short lines actually suited the poem. On 'What men want' they interfere with the flow and appear an affectation with no discernible benefit. I am pretty sure from the punctuation that this started with a normal line length & you only broke the lines in half at a later stage.