All Comments on 'When I walk'

Your poem was mentioned in the Sunday Reviews

du lac~

as i'm sold on this image:

And the fat women laugh as their cheeks jiggle

hamburger juice trickling down double chins

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overall it is a smoking poem......don

I Love the simplicity.

Your wording is spot on.

I look and see*

Great flow, and super great wording~!!

More Please~

gave me such mixed emotions. I smiled, I laughed and then I felt sad. I had such a tugging in my heart...

~Honey

Oh, this is good, sack! I was right there with you. Great poetry!

I really like these lines:

And the fat women laugh as their cheeks jiggle

hamburger juice trickling down double chins

What an image, and an awesome ending! What I'd call a killer one! Well done!

What a wonderful way of viewing your surroundings. The world as a window. The many varied things to be looked at, examined and comtemplated. Beautiful with rich images.