by greenmountaineer
That's an epic writer's cramp right there. Sounds like it wasn't the only thing cramping. "the masked tragedies of sticks and stones" is a spiffy phrase. Wish I'd thought of it.
and I believe it's a sonnet turned on its ear, no rhyme but the form's otherwise intact, yes? Too much going on in your modicum of words to comment on but I love the double meanings--could Saul and Stephen be Bellow and King as well as biblical characters, for example? Please submit this to a poetry journal: it deserves a wider audience.
but he's not sure he quite follows everything the author is trying to say with this poem. It is a good enough poem that he keeps reading it, though, so perhaps he'll sometime get all the meaning in it. The Saul and Stephen allusion is quite interesting and used well.
I think having each line start with a capital letter made me pause in the wrong places, so I had to read it through again as if there weren't there and then enjoyed it immensely.
BTW why is your voting turned off?
another thing,
Hope against hope, I sought my Damascus
But all I wrote was a roadhouse poem
Not sure I understand. Is finding Damascus a cathartic thing? Meaning through the writing you wish fulfillment, and all you get is crap?