by greenmountaineer
another thing,
Hope against hope, I sought my Damascus
But all I wrote was a roadhouse poem
Not sure I understand. Is finding Damascus a cathartic thing? Meaning through the writing you wish fulfillment, and all you get is crap?
I think having each line start with a capital letter made me pause in the wrong places, so I had to read it through again as if there weren't there and then enjoyed it immensely.
BTW why is your voting turned off?
but he's not sure he quite follows everything the author is trying to say with this poem. It is a good enough poem that he keeps reading it, though, so perhaps he'll sometime get all the meaning in it. The Saul and Stephen allusion is quite interesting and used well.
and I believe it's a sonnet turned on its ear, no rhyme but the form's otherwise intact, yes? Too much going on in your modicum of words to comment on but I love the double meanings--could Saul and Stephen be Bellow and King as well as biblical characters, for example? Please submit this to a poetry journal: it deserves a wider audience.
That's an epic writer's cramp right there. Sounds like it wasn't the only thing cramping. "the masked tragedies of sticks and stones" is a spiffy phrase. Wish I'd thought of it.