All Comments on 'A Babe Amongst...Werewolves? Ch. 02'

longer chapters please love it so far ....

Doesn't bode well for our spunky heroine. Dun, dun, dunnnnn....

I like the changing POVs. Gives more detail to the story. Your descriptions of being drugged out were great. Made me feel light headed and nauseous just reading it. A few minor editing things, but nothing to distract from the quality of the story. If the grammar police wake up today, nod politely and carry on. ;)

Looking forward to more. I dream of a feminist take over of the pack......sigh.

A decent start,LONGER CHAPTERS PLEASE,this is a good 2 minute read,would really like something to "get into"...keep up the good work,,,,

Ok good to know, I swear when I write the chapters it seems like alot then it posts and it's not even two pages! This chapter was about 2500 words, I'm writing ch 3 now, I promise I'll hit at least 5000 for you! :) hopefully I'll be submitting it by today or tomorrow!

@FA_JF haha only time will tell, all i will say is to remember it is always darkest before the dawn ;)

Keep writing comments if you enjoyed/didn't I really like getting feedback!! :D

a pack of rogues with a pack structure?

Rogues don't have a pack structure, they're out for themselves not a part of a pack, it just doesn't make sense.

This is pretty good, need longer chapters tho, I like the heroine a lot of attitude lol good job tho

I love how you've really given the main character a defined personality. The sarcasm and humor you've put in is very amusing and I can tell you've put great effort into this story so far. Also, I hope Marigold and Elle find a way to improve their situation. As someone mentioned earlier, I'm sure we'd all love to see longer story lengths, although as a story writer myself, I realize how difficult that can be. I just hope that you aren't like me and continue going into writers' blocks. I'm sure the support from your story followers will be enough. You still have a lot of paths you can travel with this story, and if you need any ideas or suggestions your readers have your back. Also, I didn't really notice any grammatical errors so truly congratulate yourself.

Hey everyone :)

Working on chapter 3 as I write this, I'll defintely be submitting it this afternoon! And it's longer!

@MissMetaphoricalStick thanks! I'm sure there are some grammar problems in there hehe, but honestly i figure as long as it's good enough jt doesn't distract readers from the actual story I'm not going to sweat it!

Yeah this is my first attempt at writing anything like this, or really anything other than stories in high school haha, it is a little overwhelming! I would like that, I still haven't fully decided where I want this to go, so comments/suggestions etc are more than welcome! I am defintely going to focus on writing longer chapters from now on though, force myself to write those extra words!

@redlion ha I didn't really think about the fact that normally rogues are essentially loners in werewolf stories, so thanks for pointing it out, I will make sure to explain that dynamic in the next chapters to clarify for you guys.

@anonymous (rogue comment) I disagree with you saying that it doesn't make sense. While it is unusual, I don't think there is a set rule in werewolf lore that all rogues can never be in a pack together (or perhaps are just in a evil pack). As this is already a story about mythical supernatural creatures I feel like the suspension of disbelief can be extended to cover the concept of a rogue pack. Also, not to quibble, (yes I am actually using quibble) but TECHNICALLY I never used the word rogue anywhere in my story to describe the wolves, even though I can understand why they are perceived in that way.

You haven't done the statistics list thingy... Comment before me had asked for more description of our girl and I was seconding that with the caveat re #'s. :)

Perhaps you can work some of her history in via her thoughts about what she has lost and/or what she is fighting to get back. Maybe some description of her via the observations of Marie or the thugs.

About writing in general...I, too, am very,very fond of commas! I'm also obsessed with ellipses. More formal writing requires these be controlled. More relaxed writing, especially something more conversational, I say let 'em rip!

Go Elle! Fight the power!

Get an editor, it really is painful to read!

I check constantly whether Chapter 3 has gone up, I was wondering whether you have a blog or something?

I love this. great twist to the whole were story. keep up the good work can't wait for chapter 3.

I like the way this is heading but the chapters are too short. hard to really immerse myself in the story.

Hey everyone!

I'm so so sorry for the enormous delay for chapter 3! I'd planned to submit it a few weeks ago but it wasn't where I wanted it before I went away camping for 2 weeks with no Internet/power! And then I came back and uni started so I have been too busy! But I have a free day so I am fairly confident I will submit it today, I have really been working to make it longer as well, so I'll put another post to let you guys know when it is officially submitted and I'll really work to be quicker for the next chapters :-/

@anon sorry I don't have a blog! But I'll try and be better with keeping you guys updated even if its just a post in comments on here in the future :)

Any updates?

I see so many great comments and I think your a winner....

awesome story I am dangling on the edge.....wow it would really be great if she kicked blonde wolfie boy's ass.....I would love it!

Its a great story just chapters need to be longer and you need to continue the story

its been three freaking months AND THERE STILL IS NO THIRD CHAPTER i need another chapter

I guess you´re not intending to complete this story. It´s a shame because it´s good and has many possibilities. Think about it again and start writting. I think it´s a good story.

We've all been waiting since last July, and we're all very impatient now. Seems to me like you've been working on Ch. 3 for a very long time. So, you're going to have to do something about it, like finish the damn thing and get the bloody thing posted. PLEASE! :)

You had mentioned a third chapter, will it be out soon? Or will we wait a year or ten like with Jean M. Auel's books?

Chapter 3 has just been submitted so once it's approved it will be up hopefully by the end of next week! Sorry for the delay! :)

So far so good. A little short in length but otherwise an interesting story.