by Tio_Narratore
I wonderful story. I could easily identify with the characters. Are but with finesse.
I really got caught up in the story.
Sometimes a dash of sensuality is hotter than a boatload of sex. Keep up the good work.
Grey
An 18 year old, friendless man sits alone at a table in a bar, nursing a single malt instead of his usual beer, eyeing the businessmen and women around him, and envying their sociability.
I fixed the first paragraph for you. You need an editor, man!
I LOVE first time stories and this was done with style and taste. I was Amber as I read this story, choosing the younger man who would do anything to please me. I felt his nervousness and found it delicious. For one night, they are in love and it was beautiful. So well done, Tio. Bravo!
Lovely, but isn't there a viewpoint problem here? How does he feel about his first experience? And why the fuck has he waited till 18; Lit. rules perchance? The old bard couldn't have blogged R&J here, I'd hazard.
I loved the idea of the experienced woman choosing the 'youngster' over all the drooling businessmen. Hope to see more from this author.