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All Comments on 'A Dark New Home'

by jstltm

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 9 years ago
Great beginning but would've been better..

Would've been better with some more detail at the end there. Great start though

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Wow, could be a great story if longer

Great prose, loved it but this was way too short. There was the build up and then "drop off a cliff" ending. Keep going. You're off to a great start!

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
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Wow, Loved it.

jstltmjstltmover 9 years agoAuthor
Fair comment

Yeah sorry about that one, I was kinda going for the dread thing...but I will splash them together more in my later ones, give you guys some breaks!

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Why so abrupt?

After such a fascinating build-up, it just ends with outrageous ambiguity.

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