All Comments on 'A Dedication'

I haven't read any of your previous works, but this one sure is great!

There are a lot of small problems with this. You really should have run a spell check, and looked it over (while not sleep deprived) before sending it in. You said he had short black hair, and in the same breath you said he had short dyed-blue hair. Then later on, Charles told him to wipe his face with his green tank top, even though at the beginning Alex was wearing a blue tank top - Charles was wearing the green tank top. This is definitely subpar.