All Comments on 'A Foreign Affair Ch. 02'

it was a great story.. looking forward to A Foreign Affair Ch. 03. :) keep up the good work!

I agree, I can't wait to see the next chapter.

Great detail and point-of-view. Looking forward to Chapter 3 - Tear Racheal UP!

Keep writing!

I thought this chapter didn't quite fit with the opening premise of the story. Remember in Chapter One Lisa says "It was all her (Marie's) fault of course. Before she came into our lives we had been ordinary people just like everyone else. She had changed everything and had loved every damn minute of it." That idea of an outsider corrupting an innocent family is tremendously exciting; now we are told that the father and sister are already having an incetuous relationship and the mother is more or less tolerating it. That considerably weakens the impact of Marie in corrupting the family. These are two separate ideas, either of which would make a great story, but which don't quite mesh together. Well written though.