All Comments on 'A Genie for Jake Ch. 01'

Has amazing potential please continue for the love of god and btw you have a well sculpted writing ability.

Definitely 5 star worthy, can't wait to see where you go from here, keep up the great work.

Great start to what looks to be a very fun story. A couple editing errors did annoy me but I try not to let those influence a rating.

The only story point I didn't like was the abandonment. I don't know of any state that would let a child of 10 years live on their own. Jake would have ended up in foster care.

But I expect that this was needed for the later development so I will suspend my disbelief for now.

Thanks for a great read!

I think you might be my new favorite author. Between this and your Zeke Jordan, you've taken the two best story ideas I've had kicking around in my head and written them far better than I ever could. As one other comment said about your Zeke stories, PLEASE don't drop these and leave us hanging - these are two awesome starts!

Love all the genie story's and this looks like a great start to one.

but please dont use the plot from other genie stories

Edit! Proof read! There were many instances in which a sentence had been changed but the surrounding ones had not. A few small grammatical errors. I love the works you are pulling from and I hope you do wonderful with the rest of this series. Looking forward to the next one.

The genie chronicles was also the reason I started reading on this site and is still my favorite to this day. I was saddened when it didn't continue but this story is just as good so far (perhaps better). There were a few spelling errors but nothing a reader couldn't understand and not as bad as others. Please continue!

Keep it up. Lookin forward to the next installment.

I can't wait to read more.

I'm glad I found this story. I also enjoyed "Genie Chronicles" & "Beautiful Wish" but due to the attack of the Anti-Djinn Brigade (which, in my opinion, worked behind the scenes to keep sex genie stories from being brought to any satisfactory conclusions) I am concerned that you may yet fall under the same fate. Thus, I shall remain cautiously optimistic that this will buck the trend and be enjoyable to me; from beginning to END. Please assure us that you do have an ending in mind and that this will be brough to fruition.

As for the story itself, I like how you're acknowledging the works above in the story without trying to force it (as of ch.1) into the Broly-verse. Best of luck and here's to hoping that this one will be able to see the sunset instead of killed in its prime.

You could use a bit of help from an editor, but not a whole lot... just a few minor mistakes that don't really detract from the storyline too much. I hope you'll add more chapters in the future.

I like the writing well overall. As another comment said, having an editor wouldn't hurt, but it wasn't all that distracting. The one thing I would suggest is trying to avoid too much familiar territory. This story references other genie stories which isn't a problem, but also repeating situations could diminish the potential of your own stories.

I like - interested to see what paths you wander down with this tale. As others have pointed out - a little more care with spelling/grammar - editors enjoy getting an early read.

I really enjoyed the story, it's fantastic! Keep on writing and I look forward to ch 3

I love stories on see genies and have read quite a few this one starting to intrigue me more and more keep it up

Very nice beginning!!! Curious to see how the plot goes...

Like the story a lot. AAAA++++

Fun read and it’s only the beginning.