by quale
Forget anonymous of Canada - he was obviously doing something else when he put his finger on the send button! It had the makings of a good story, but you just stopped far too soon.
....relationship huh? Nothing my gal likes more than forced bondage and being treated like a cheap swap gift.Spellcheck or reality check,can't decide which you need more.
Pistolpackinpete:
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I've dated and am in fact married to someone who finds this kind of fantasy extremely arousing. But of course this is just a story not a plan.
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I wrote this story long long ago back in college and I've thought about writing a sequel from time to time but never got around to it. If someone else wants to write a sequel go ahead, no reason not to have two alternate sequels.
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Thx anon uk, I deleted anon from canada's comments (they were content-less insults)
@Pistolpackinpete,
I don't know about the women you've dated but all the women I've dated (and I assume everyone of both sexes) likes to fantasize about doing things that they wouldn't in fact do or even enjoy in real life. Studies show that something like 70% of women fantasize about some kind of rape/forced sex but this doesn't mean they would enjoy such an encounter in real life.
Stories I write are obviously fantasies (sometimes mine, sometimes things that turned on people I've been involved with) not suggestions for how to have a real relationship or actually treat women you are involved with in real life. This sort of fantasy is something that I have enjoyed sharing with women who were involved with me and something I thought other people might enjoy reading. If you can't understand the distinction between a sexual fantasy and what is a good idea to actually do you shouldn't be reading the stories on this site.
I think the story may have been spellchecked since you commented. If someone wants to politely suggest I still have some spellchecking/copyediting to do I may look at the story again when I have time.
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To those with the helpful suggestions such as the comment about the story being a bit wordy or perhaps ending too early I appreciate the feedback and will take it under advisement when writing other stories. For a variety of reasons (including the fact that many people really enjoyed this story and the fact that it was one of the first ones I wrote) I've decided not to make major changes to the story nor fill in an ending that might disappoint some people who mentally filled in something else. However, I do appreciate the feedback and future stories I write will benefit.
I LOVED your story. I'd LOVE IT if my husband ever did this to me! I can't wait to read the rest of this story! PLEASE write more on this story.
It’s well written and does come across as a fantasy because it’s deliberately left unfinished. The reader’s imagination can fill in the blanks.
A lot of these type of stories have more details (including the roommates reaction) and come across as very realistic which takes them a big step away from fantasy towards reality. This naturally opens up the potential for his actions to backfire on the original couple.
As it’s a fantasy it’s believable that he’s fulfilling a fantasy of hers with a safe 3rd party.