All Comments on 'A Gift From His Father Ch. 12'

Like the parts before, very nice!

Please don't keep us waiting too long for the next chapter!

Enjoyed it a lot all the parts are great and can't wait fir the next part don't ever stop.

Was this chapter just a tease ? Not bitching , but kind of short don't you think ? Ok sue me . I like longer stories . Hope the next teaser is out soon .

You need to start introducing a worthy adversary for John to overcome and maybe put his step mom and step sisters in danger, forcing him to convert them into his agents so as to help them protect themselves, thus kicking the incest up another notch.

Also you maybe need to bring in some of his old gang of friends to join John's posse of agents one or a few at a time, so he has both guys and girls to keep him humble that he can trust to watch his back. Mark is a good start, but the football player looks to be a prime candidate as well, then of course there is the new April, whose mother Candice is already an agent.

You know how he muses he needs men he can trust to possibly be agents. Have Elizabeth tell him how he can do that.

Also with any of his friends he adds you can also add in their MILF mothers, with Candace being the first one of many?

Like the way they turned Rachel into a Bimbo. serves the B!tch . Now as for turning guys if I had to put my hands on their asses or Cocks . I would just do Mom's and Sisters.

Excelent as always :) - Keep up the great work :)

I have really enjoyed your story so far but for gods sake he effectively labodamized a woman in this chapter. i can understand the step sisters they wear practically plotting to kill him. But all she was really guilty of is being a bad coworker. I have no problem if they deserve it but the fact that he practically did it on a whim is very disheartening

I'm starting to get a "power corrupts absolute power corrupts absolutely" vibe off john in the last few chapters

remember in chapter 6 when Lafayette Hubbard did the same thing to April and how enraged that made him. or in chapter 5 when Elizabeth shows with Penny expecting him to make her a agent of the ring and it pissed john off that it was against her will but he did practically the same thing to Karen in this story ya he didn't make her a agent that's only because he decided she was to young. I'm also wondering if there mite be some backlash from the ring in store for John in the near Future. looking forward to more chapters soon Dravin_Black

Great story,this story is just getting good never end it

other than some grammar issues i thought it was a good story.

don't stop writing I think that this is one of the best stories out there. I'm a shut in and read a lot, this is my third go around. thanks for the enjoyment.

John will soon join his father as a prisoner in the ring.

I agree that John is starting down the dark path. Also, is it just me, or is this become almost entirely a lesbian MILF series?

the 1st year he supports his agents, then after that they have to fend for themselves. So he has basically turned them all into hookers, including his mother. At this point he is doing much more bad than good, so it is only a matter of time he joins his father in the ring

I am really into this story but seriously can you have some variety in the way John Alters people? Everyone gets taller and bigger tits. I get that he kind of has a thing for that but every once in awhile could you change things up? Also going to point out that you repeatedly have him prepare his agents to be three hole sluts but I think we've only had one or two anal scenes in the first 12 chapters. Still it's a great story just a couple of servations

I'm waiting for the part to where the ring lets his father take over his body and correct a lot of his mistakes. Then the ring and his father force him to realize what he's been doing is extremely wrong and if he doesn't start doing good things hell in up in the ring with his father.

Quote - "Where are my manors," She said.

Try looking down at the Real Estate office - or better still, try looking for the word 'manners'.

Editor

PROOFREADER!!

Lose the spellchecker and find someone who can spell.

This is a very good story being ruined by your lack of grammar, poor spelling and inability to spot when you are using the wrong words

Well, John did send his long-time buddy Mark over to help Cynthia at the boutique, and she did need some good sex, ... so this was not a real surprise, was it? ;-) TTFN

@JohnnyRebBB, if you were an English as a second language person who was writing a pretty good erotic story, and was also improving your written English skills, as well as giving his fans a good story to read. Then a few tenses errors, and a number of wrong words, ... my favorite was from a number of chapters back when he sounded out torture and came up with 'torcher', ... also, ashamed when it should have been a shame (with no d), ... but the tale is readable as it is, and it is quite enjoyable too. ;-) TTFN