by T_Silverwolf
I hope you continue this. I am enjoying the way it begins and have read your second one as well. Came back here just to let you know that I enjoyed it. Nice work
Well, that was certainly not my idea of erotic literature! I'm very disappointed! I expect a lot more in a story, even if it is only the first chapter. You only wrote one page, too! I'm not very motivated to read any more judging how lousy the first page was. Are you writing a novel? I don't think that I want to read chapter after chapter to finally read something erotic, but I will read one more chapter before I make my final decision.
You did not do a very good job with your first attempt!
Hey folks,
I know there's a lot of people who haven't really got on with this-- in fact its literally my lowest rated entry and there are comments like people being disappointed. This does not sit well with me!
So tell me how I can improve the story and so forth, is there something that bugs you? Feel free to be harsh, I have thick skin, but this genuinely bugs me. I want to become a better writer and I'll only do it by putting myself out there, so please, lay on the critiques if you would!
Thanks so much for reading,
Tammy
Keep going with it. I can't judge until I see the some of the rest.
Beautiful intro, the amount of detail and personality is genuinely palpable, i hope its consistent, ive been looking for something to obsess over