All Comments on 'A Marriage in Turmoil Ch. 01'

Ah the old, "can't shake these feelings I'm having" bullshit. Might as well say you're an immature twat that can't function in normal society and is led by their genitalia and emotions. Christ, talk about contrived nonsense. Unless they are suffering from a diagnosable illness that has been established, I just can't buy into stories that play this card as the reason the wife wants to fuck around. And even then I'd say it's just lazy writing.

As for the husband, yeah he was a moron - but most people are when they're 20! They really shouldn't have been married and having kids so young, or at least he shouldn't have since he was a self-proclaimed pussy hound. He did learn fast though once he realized how badly his actions were hurting his wife after getting caught and reformed, so I'll give him that. Still, it was hard to invest in him and feel bad if he got cheated on because of his past actions. Usually by the end of a chapter in a story like this I'd be on edge hoping she doesn't cheat, but in this case I'm like, "meh whatever happens, happens."

These writers never understand the subtlety of human emotion. This MC hits his wife with a whole raft of accusations almost instantly. There is no attempt to analyze the problem, to comfort or understand. No, this writer goes from 0-to-speed-of-light in .001 seconds. Silly hyperbole. No, worse than that, because hyperbole is a decent literary technique. No, this is lazy writing. It's like using cheat codes.

Just off the top, it doesn't seem like he should have left her like that. She came to him, told him that she loved him, that she was confused, and asked for help. Seems to me that he should have stayed and got her someone to talk to. I hope that I would have done that.

She should have divorced her husband the first time he cheated. Had her affairs and then got back together if that's what they wanted.

Husband is obviously a very dumb ass.

I read the comments below and see lots of BS. There is no hypocricy on his part. He screwed up and had an affair FIFTEEN years ago. She supposedly forgave him, but yet keeps throughing it in his face, which is also BS.

Then to tell her husband that "I wanted him to touch me. I'm so sorry, I can't get these feeling out of my system"

is clearly a great reason for a seperation and for her to get help. She didn't say she made a mistake and won't do it again, she stated just the opposite.

She clearly needs help

5 Big Blazing Stars for BG so far. I would be lining up the councilors if that was me. But this isn't my story. I would be scared that the wife is going to start fucking around during this separation and just turn into a whore/slut. But the writing is good, The story is good. Can't wait to see what happens. Good Job BG. Thanks, Buster2U

I'm not sure what he saw at the dance hall was all that bad. Wasn't good, but... However, in the discussion with his wife, what she said leaves the questions asked & unasked. I think 2mo is a bit long for the separation, but it's not my story. That he cheated early in their marriage but forgiven, & she continues to bring it up is not good. Some of the story seems to be a bit rushed.

From what she says, she seems to at least wants experience with another man or 3... to even the "playing field", so to speak. But once you're married, any relations before hand shouldn't come into play. Unless she wants to play with an ex. Thus far, overall, so good. 4 stars on this part. Bob

He's not a hypocrite, he just has different limits than she does/did. Also, he cheated at the beginning of their marriage, this is 15 years in. And he'd only be a hypocrite if he *expected* her to forgive him, or if he'd have been outraged if she'd told him to take a hike after he cheated. He didn't. He would have accepted being told to go. If she had then immediately cheated and told him, he still wouldn't have been a hypocrite if he didn't offer her the same generosity she offered him. A dick, maybe, or at least a less forgiving person, sure. But not a hypocrite. Now though? 15 years later ( he's neither a hypocrite or a dick for expecting different, more mature behavior from someone he's been married to for 15 years rather than 5 minutes.

That said, the dialogue where he asks if she intends to cheat, and she says she's confused, etc...is incredibly clunky and awkward. It doesn't fit the rest of the story, and feels forced and disjointed. Also very rushed. 3*

OK I guess I like your stories but the husband here is hypocritical - if his standards had been applied to him he’d have been kicked to the curb after his affair. His standards are those of the usual BTB crowd i.e. “ one and done” for the wife but not for the husband. Hopefully he’ll see what an idiot he is the next part

Uh-oh, bad move cuckster, playing right into the hands of Femdom agitprop.

White knight shit. The skank didn't ask him for help, or protection, he had to DRAG it out of her. She wants to cheat. She had her opportunity to walk away years ago. Now he does.

He's a hypocritical prick. He deserves her fucking around on him.

Why give the skank bitch 2 months......just divorce her!!!!

Who the fuck cares? A cheater who objects to being married to a cheater is a slime covered hypocrite. They deserve each other.

Temporary separation is the same thing as giving your wife time to have sex with other men.

Why make a big text just to say you're a happy cuckold, timriv?

"I never told my wife what to wear, what to think or what to do. I told her no matter what she does I would always defer to her on how she lives her life. I trust her to not hurt me a vice versa. We spend a lot of time apart due to business traveling but we have been happily married for 35 yrs. I HAVE BEEN FAITHFUL, IF SHE HASN'T I NEVER KNEW, SO IT HASN'T AFFECTED US. I doubt very much if she has been unfaithful, all I do know is that we are still in love and happy".

DG, really? Two words - "Double standards". Yes, they are older and have children, but he was a horned dog and she didn't leave. She plays, "touchy-feely" and he acts like she murdered someone. Is it right? No. But neither was he in the beginning. Should he bail? No - marriage counseling is there for a reason. *sigh* Off to read part 2...hope he pulls his head out...

Great as usual, DG. :)

Walking out when she is in turmoil doesn't make sense. Forcing her into seeing a therapist or doing together would make much more sense.

Oh God, yet another husband living his marriage with a firm grip on the double standard. It was OK for him to fuck around (“Boys will be boys”) but when his wife starts having feelings about others, he immediately leaves and takes his moral righteous indignation with him. Sorry, buddy, you gave up the moral high ground years ago. You reap what you sow.

She was cheating for the last few months, just not having intercourse. AND she cleaims she doesn't want it to stop. SEE YA.

Nothing worthwhile here, I skimmed further along and it was about as flat as the brain waves of a MAGA member.

Did nothing for me on any level.

Nancy may play show & tell with some guy with their things below their belly-buttons...

How will be monitor the fat slut for two months?

He was too quick to react negatively. IMHO, counseling should have been the next step if he wanted to stay together. Moving out is the right direction if Divorce is in their future

The dude's trying too hard to create problems for himself, he's going to get what he's working for!

I agree with the commentators below.

In point of real fact Nancy was cheating and everyway but sexual intercourse And this was working for the fact that had been going on for several months and she hid it from him.

It was also a mistake for him not to go down to the dance floor to the front of his wife take her out of there and begin some serious discussions about how the marriage coming open that point on.

To his wife's credit she came completely clean which I have respected which which is not to say that I approved over behavior.

I don't believe moving out with a good idea and I would have possessed it on counseling.

If Nancy showed major signs of resistance or it wasn't working I think then I would have moved out and filed for divorce.

At that point her needs are no longer relevant and it becomes a point of personal survival and going on with your life revenge and suffering with her needs and feelings are as she is pretty much given up on caring about yours no matter what she says beyond that.

The fact that Nancy does not think dancing with another man, letting him touch her ass and her breast, and kissing another man is not cheating on Jim is wrong. She is already cheating on him. She just has not fucked another man yet. Jim should have taken her in to get analyzed for any medical problems and he should have started counseling with her. He also should have started taking her to night clubs and dance with her. He should have told her to stop going out on these nights with the girls as they were detrimental to their marriage. He should have done all of this and NOT left home now in her time of greatest need. Jim made a mistake here and he also gave Nancy the permission she needed to cheat on him. What a fool!!!

This is a great start to the story. Jim was in trouble when Nancy told him that she was going through a menopause phase and her mood swings were getting to her. This was a cry for help and he missed the signs. The fact that their sex life was almost zero was another warning sign. It is so important to maintain your couplehood when going through a marriage. I have been with the same woman for over 50 years and the reason we are still together is that we have maintained our couplehood and we communicate. We are also each other's best friend. I can see this marriage falling apart already

Can't see how this can possibly be a good move. At best, it is inappropriate.

He needs an immediate answer from her... Stay or Go??!!

Making a mistake giving her two months.

Hard decisions watching your wife with another guy, even if you were a cheater yourself and had reformed. Once you saw the error of your own ways I'm sure now he felt what his wife did when he cheated so enough of the recriminations for past deeds. It now sounds like she needs some analysis and counseling, splitting up for awhile doesn't work, been there done that and never got back together-end of story.

Guy is awfully self-righteous for someone who cheated multiple times in the past. Not saying he should go along with it, but at least handle it in a more reasonable manner instead of going straight to ultimatums and separation, considering how he used to be in the exact situation that she is now.

What a stupid idea to give wife chance to cheap by moving out? But it is good for story drama. Nice suspense buildup.

-JT

When nancy stayed with jim after he cheated, that does not give her a hall pass.

Sounds like 2 months of permission for her to have affairs.

I think I've read this before, but I don't remember it. It's off to a good start.

Not surface communication but deep and seek help if need

Hi honey I am home

How's your day Uh huh OK 5 minutes and done don't get it

He should not have gotten married as he did say

Marriage cleave on to each other as one

Most people don't or ignore

It is running away from the problem. At this time, more than ever, she needs support and guidance. He needs it too. Leaving her to her own devices is a mistake. This is the time in any marriage for open and frank communication. Men are too reluctant to talk about their problems, but now is the exact time that he should.

Good start for.the.story. Jim wasn't perfect, but he had been for fifteen years. Now she wants a hall pass. Just no way.

I, HOPE THAT WOMEN LIKE A STORY LIKE THIS AND THIS KIND OF ENDING.

I, KNOW THAT MEN DO, WHERE SEVERAL YEARS OF MARRIAGE, CAN MAKE

SOME THINGS LOSE LUSTER. BUT THE YEARS OF LOVE, COMMITMENT, THE

MERGING OF TWO SOULS, ARE STRONG ENOUGH TO WORK THEIR WAY THOUGH EVEN THE HARDEST PROBLEMS OF THEIR MARRIED LIVES. IT MAKES MUCH BETTER READING WHERE ONE PARDNER DOESN'T LET LIVES

BE RUINED, BY WORKING, PULLING, AND STAYING TRUE, TO BRING HEALING BACK AND GOING ON WITH THEIR LIVES STRONGER. PLEASE NO WIMP MEN THAT JUST STARE AT FLOOR AND CRY, THINKING MAYBE IT'S BETTER TO JUST LET WIFE HAVE AND DO AS SHE PLEASES, BLAH-BLAH PUKE!

Interesting comments: They don't like your "hero" very much. You have to be a very good writer to get them so upset.

Seems all the guys in DG Hears stories are all cut from the same cloth. It is OK for them to cheat or have sex with al sorts of girls before they get married but the wife can’t. Seems the guys are all afraid of losing their wives to another guy or being seen as a wimp or cuckold. The wife, it seems, has become hubby’s property and he tells her what she can and can’t do, these guys belong in Saudi Arabia. I have a Morman brother in law who acts just like that and it drives my wife, her sister, crazy. He bugs the hell out of me too. I never told my wife what to wear, what to think or what to do. I told her no matter what she does I would always defer to her on how she lives her life. I trust her to not hurt me a vice versa. We spend a lot of time apart due to business traveling but we have been happily married for 35 yrs. I have been faithful, if she hasn’t I never knew, so it hasn’t effected us. I doubt very much if she has been unfaithful, all I do know is that we are still in love and happy.

Your story so do as you wish with it. Fiction I know.

BUT I think you just painted the dumb shit into a fucking corner! Only an idiot would gave a woman that kind of ultimatum. In the real world I'd guess he just shot his balls off, and probably committed marital suicide! 3* (Some of your stuff is good. Not this.)

or pull the pin and wait for the fall out, TK U MLJ LV NV

I don't understand why he left. Nancy should have the one who left. She was the one who was unsure and unhappy with her marriage. She was the one who implied Jim wasn't enough for her and she wanted to try other men. She also went waaaaaaaay over the line of what is acceptable for a married woman to do with another man.

In other words she told Jim he was enough for her. There is absolutely no reason for Jim to leave.

There is also absolutely no reason for Jim to be made into the bad guy for leaving. She told him she wasn't happy. So yeah, get out of his face and figure things out. He shouldn't have to "win" her back for something out of his control when she is saying he isn't enough.

Put women together in a "girls night out" and what do you get??? NOTHING BUT TROUBLE! I know!

This is why married women shouldn't go to clubs. My wife doesn't, and I've known several women who did, and 100% of them got divorced.

Like this story but I still don't understand why he left.

I would be very angry but would stay if she would work with me.

you bet. I wont go to ch 2 or 3, because we are reading about stupid kids that should have never gotten married to begin with. Do they love each other I would say yes, but so stupid, so immature, it's heart breaking.

The wife told him about the problem she's having. Told him she didn't know what to do, but she had NOT cheated on him - yet. Told him the problem wasn't going away and it was driving her crazy. The goofy husband responds with threats and then abandons her. What a complete tool, this guy is a self-absorbed gonad of the first order.

If he can't recognize a cry for help when she spells it out for him, then he shouldn't be pretending to be a man, let alone a Husband and Dad. When you put that hat on, you have responsibilities, most importantly - protect your family. At this minute, Mom, his wife, badly needs help and he abandons her just to see what happens. He deserves to lose her, but I hope that's not the result because of the kids.

Take her to see a doctor and get her checked out. If everything's okay there then get her into therapy and see what's up with her head or their marriage. You do NOT threaten her and walk out. Loser.

I just don't believe in separations. Either stay and really try to work it out or divorce. You can't work on problems if you are not together. Can't wait for the next chapter.

if for the only reason that it raises some interesting questions. married for 15, assume married at 20years old, that's about 35. he found the reason for being faithful, by the hurt it caused. I believe the reason she is having such a hard time is because she knows first hand the hurt cheating causes. I do believe he made a tactical error by leaving, not being there to show that he was still her rock to stand on, and depend on, or the value of a husband. at this point in the story, I believe he was an asshole. she is having a problem, stated right to him point blank, and what does he do, runs away, nice guy.

When she said she forgave him she lied.

She still throws it at him 15 years later.

She holds on to it as a get out of jail card for her to cheat.

Once you forgive someone you can no longer hold it against them.

Once you forgive someone you give up the right to revenge or balancing the scales.

She says she has forgiven him, but she has not.

Which makes saying it a lie.

He cheated, he will never have a right to expect fidelity. Ever, he has already thrown it away!

The fucking twat.

If the question is "Well, Nancy, is that what you want? A chance to have your little flings and then come back home to me after your pussy gets satisfied?"

And the answer is "I don't know Jim, I just don't know"

You know everything you need to know.

Grammatical note: "... between their mother and I." should be "... between their mother and me." It is a common error on this site and it annoys me every time.

five stars. Wonderful story line. My second time through.

Dump her really? Double standard.

she was honest

rather than cut and run, get help. counseling, join a support group, work together.

leaving, he has given tacit permission.

Nancy replied, "I don't know Jim, I just don't know" as she was crying.

The fact that she didn't KNOW is reason enough to dump her!

Unusually in this category we have a wife being open and honest about her desires to her husband, of course he does the wrong thing by moving out. He should be reassuring her of his love , giving her more attention and understanding, it's a natural thing to have desires for others even when you are in a good and loving marriage, if my wife thought I no longer fancied our neighbour or one of her friends she would rush me to see our Doctor as she would think I was ill. It's being open with your thoughts and not acting on them is what makes a marriage. When a man or woman says I have never looked at another I don't believe it because it is not the way of nature and to think you can only find one other person on this planet who you find sexually attractive, well it is just not so or maybe their libido is at zero in which case their other half is already getting their jollies elsewhere. Of course if everybody did the right thing in these stories well we would not have a story, being successful in life is all about the least number of mistakes we make on the way. Well written story and easy to follow..

you write well and although i have doubts as to the wisdom of your characters; i did enjoy the story.........so far.

But of course this writer always has the husband cheat so the wife has an excuse to cheat. The writer has to be a Cunt. No man would write shit like this.

But his whining about her throwing his AFFAIR in his fack well then FUCK HIM

I agree.

If he leaves her to stew in her turmoil alone, you can bet she's going to weaken and look for some comfort elsewhere.

A better bet would be to take her away for a romantic weekend and screw her brains out!

I agree with the comment entitled "talk don't run". Separating from his wife when she has physical needs is ridiculous; he's asking for more trouble.

A great start. Five stars.

Another hubbie running from the problem not talking and helping to solve the problem. Especially a knee jerk reaction to walk out within hours of hearing the problem.

Hopefully common sense and communication prevails.

Where's the sex? Boring so far.

Will she screw around? Will this be revenge from fifteen years ago? We'll see...

But that's what makes the story interesting, isn't it?

work on your problem ,moving out creates a bigger problem.2 months .

How dumb can he be? He walks out on her for two months as a solution to the problem. I think not. He needs to work on the marriage rather than run away. What a dumb coward!

You are unreal. Why don't you tell us all your real name and what date you turn 30 so we can all look for your obituary after you commit suicide to 'off' your 'old hide'. In fact, tell us when you turn 18 so we know to start the countdown.

Sorry, bud, but your 'old hide' comments are both inappropriate and not appreciated. The list is long of very beautiful women in their 40's, 50's, 60's or even older. Grow up.

The jerk of a husband, way over reacted. After all, she is just an 40 year old hide. So why should he give a hoot if a man kisses her or even fucks her. It is not like she a sexy 30 year old or younger.

In the first scenario she fucks around on him and about her third man just beats the crap out of her and he nurses her back to health and forgives her. They live happily ever after.

Second scenario: it becomes an open marriage and one or the other falls for someone else and they divorce. They live unhappily ever after.

I don't know how it will end but he should man up and let her get laid, he got plenty in his time. I like to think that I would do that, not sure if I could.

Your whole Story moves WAY to fast. There are supposed to be feelings transmitted but honestly I didn't feel anything even once. It reads like a technical manual.

Lets hope the latter chapters get better.

It was abrupt.

The husband in this story moves way too fast in moving out. Counselling would have been the first option pursued if the character is anything like he was introduced as by the author. His ultra quick turn from questioning his wife to acusing her of all types of misbehaviour is mercurial and exacerbates rather than solves the problems.

Make no mistake, the immaturity of this asshole is what is driving this woman into other men's arms. I can feel very little sympathy for him because of it. DG, you swung and missed with this one!

Love your work I've read most of it and will continue to do so.

This line made me laugh I'm afraid:}

She still feels like it was partly her fault. If she wouldn't have been such an idiot, it might not have happened.

Ya Thin?

my problem with this beginning besides it's over-simplification is that you imply quite obviously that the wife is looking to capture the experience of variety that hubby once enjoyed, but you then jump to an adultery paradigm which actually exacerbates the simplification of what might have been a more complex cautionary tale.You are a better writer than that.Take your time!Pistolpackinpete

I always admire your writing DG, but this plot is pretty rediculous. What is his moving out for two months going to accomplish.If she is goingthrough mid-life crisis or whatever, his moving out is supposed to do what? I like your writing but your heros, for lack of a better word, always act like total dummies.

60 year old George

So when he was unfaihful (and he admits it wasn't one time, but many) it was because he was "immature." And now that she's having similar temptations it's because she's menopausal, but he'd get rid of her ass quickly if she did. Can anyone say double standard? I think they are perfect for each other, but I'm sure we will have her as the villain because it's okay when he does, but not when she does it.

but the basic idea here is utter rubbish. The narrator has affairs and his wife forgives him. She on the other hand doesn't and he walks out. Come on! dual standards here! Keep it real. This story has got meso angry.

the excuse the change of life and emotional problems have cause many divorces.she want her cake and eat it too.she is grown woman and she knows what she doing.let hubby find another woman and she will shit on him forever.

DG:

Looks like another hit, but you sure do dig holes for someone at the beginning of your stories, and I love it. Thank You. Ronnie W.

Wow, hubby thinks she might cheat. Wife is thinking of many things, including hit monkey multiple partner sex.

So supportine loving hubby evacuates.

I'm enjoying this. I like the suspenceful buildup and the tension. Looking forward to additional chapters.

what a great start more please... now lets see what she dose. One thing for sure she never forgave him for the other women and that may be her down fall now

Because I have one, I don’t mind short chapters. There’s enough in this chapter to get my mind whirling to mull over the plot. Often I work it out and the other times I get it wrong...C’est la vie...such is life.

Like eating a toffee, if it’s two chews and a swallow then you miss most of the flavour.

Looking forward to chapter2

Regards

I think you're a twisted bugger, so can sense you're possibly going to now tell this tale from the wife's perspective, some endearing prose about how she must emancipate herself after all these years of burdening herself with his infidelities. And very plausible it will be...NOT! I know of one real-life situation identical to this...she decided she needed 'her space' to go out on him, he stressed himself to a stroke over trying to reconcile with her. Now he's an invalid, she runs (& screws) around and o/s travels on the business income his previous years of work provides. Karma will befall her!

I also agree with GoodWifey, she put the plotline right into perspective, this guy is no pussy-whipped wimp cuckold to be...."either this way or the highway..Woman!"

I reckoned as good as it was "Requital" was a touch long in one hit. I don't really mind the short bursts, have a life to attend to between reads, bit of drinking here and there, other stuff...know what I mean. At times I just wait till all chapter posts on a story are up before starting. Don't stress over it! That your stories are so good that your readership have become so aggressive in demanding more bodes well for you DG.

Thanks you and I patiently await the next chapter in your good time. Cheers

I understand the desire of the author to stop at critical points and have some suspense. That's fine. However, one must also factor in having parts that are so short that they're over before the reader can really get into it. That' bad. This part was only 3,000 words. That's not enough. Just as soon as the reader is getting familiar with the character and the plot, it ends. Personally, I think a good rule of thumb is, if the part is long enough to go to two Literotica pages, then probably it's something worthy to sink one's teeth into. If it's only one page, then it's too short to stand alone as a part, no matter how great the cliffhanger. That's why people get mad at you for posting these multiparters, because these one page parts are just too short.

The ball is in her court. I'm just wondering how she decides what she prefers? Does she go dancing and fooling around to find out? Does she sit down and think about the situation every night? Go to a counselor? What does HE EXPECT her to do? Sit at home untill he returns? Yes, I can easily see where this action of his could blow up in his face. She could well decide to determine just how much she likes having other men massage her body and she could be lost to him.

I thought she was pretty much asking him for help. What do I know?

one in your corner, great start. At first I thought the leaving was a little abrupt and premature, but after some reflection, not so. He followed her and witnessed her desire for another man, she confessed to that desire. She also confessed to two months of the same. The husband is correct in his action. He is saying to her, if this is what you want, then go for it, but you go it alone. See how you like the life of a divorced woman, single parent, and one wage earner family. He not only is forcing her into an advanced preview of what her life will be like, at the same time, he’s making a statement. There’s no way that he’s going to just sit by and watch the kids and take care of business as normal while she goes out and gets her jollies. Now she will have to worry what he is doing at the apartment. There is one other thing that happened that has dire consequences written all over it, the kiss. No one kisses a stranger, the touchy feely during the dance wasn’t much info, that could be passed off to drinking, but not the kiss, it said a lot. There appears to be much more familiarity between them than first meets the eye. I couldn’t help but wonder if he was seen by her or one of her friends at the dance hall, otherwise there might have been a whole lot more familiarity between them, and possibly no confession at home. Of course knowing your propensity for taking what looks like the normal on the outside with abnormal behavior behind the scenes, I wouldn’t presume to be presumptuous enough to have any idea where you’re headed with this story. I would bet though that I not only enjoy the ride but will like the end results as well.

HE is?

You gotta be joking. This guy has got it completely right.

She has never truly forgiven him for screwing around early in the marriage, and this is shown by....

"She always ended the arguments by throwing the affair up at me even though it was years and years earlier. I guess even though she said she forgave me deep down the negative feelings were still there."

Boy is he right about that.

Then he tells her how it is...

"Stop right there, Nancy. You have thrown that affair up to me for the last 15 years. You are not going to use it against me now to have an affair. Is that what you want, Nancy? My permission to cheat on me, to cuckold me, to make a wimp of me?........ Two months, Nancy, two months to decide if you want your freedom and new found sex libido or if you want to stay married to me. I have no idea what you are going to do but if you decide to be a fuck slut for anyone I'll apply for a divorce immediately. This two months is for you to decide what you really want, not to see how many affairs you can get in. I will just take it 'A day at a time' and suggest you do the same."

She has the kids. If she can organise to get out and see some guy, leaving the kids with a sitter, why would the husband want to even see her again? She is a big girl and now she has to make her own decision. If he stays home and tries to convince her, he will never know what she really would have decided, and she can always blame him later - same as she's thrown his affair at him for 15 years - for not letting her make her own decision.

No - he is doing the right thing - he repented and did right by her for about 15 years - now she has to decide between him and some strange cock. She is under no illusion about what he thinks so she can make a clear decision.

Hey shit, I better stop, this is longer than the chapter it is about!

Also agree that "have some confidence" is right in that the author isnt even creating suspense by ending his chapters where he does.

DG Hear - I do like some of your stories but the short chapters drive me batty (not in a good way either). Unless there is a logical reason for breaking up a story (some stories do make sense to post in multiple parts but most of yours dont imo), please just post the whole thing at once and quit worrying about the numbers of views you get or number of stories you have posted. Your stories and your choice but I really do think your stories would be better without the micro-chapters.

Very common sensed story, which could quite easily be true. I am looking forward to future chapters on this one, and it will be interesting to see if any pregnancies are developed by you or taken on by Nancy....even half nigger ones that involve a "big cock."