All Comments on 'A Mother's Dozen Ch. 01'

Good start - I'm interested to see where this is going.

Editing might help this story. By the way, the area between your hips and your navel is called your WAIST, not your WASTE.

"her long brown hair with blonde highlights, her tight waste, her supple bosoms."

Wonderful beginning. looking forward to parts 2&3 8D

Thanks for the comments, especially the one about editing. I proofread it twice but that 'waste' part never sprung to me. I've already written part 2, but before I upload it I will submit it to an editor to make sure it's perfect as can be.

Part 2 will hopefully be uploaded by around next week.

Again thanks for rating and the comments, all of you.

Looks promising.

You have a lusty beginning here. I look forward to how you develop these people.

I thoroughly enjoy mutually consensual incest stories where at least one character is self-aware, self-assured, self-confident, possesses a strong sense of self, and has a solid ego and id. Cindy appears to forefull this requirement.