All Comments on 'A Nephew's Story'

I enjoyed reading this story, it is great. Please continue with it.

I didnt remember to look at the date of the submission, but that does not matter. Please continue with this story line.

Wonderful loving family and great romantic/sexual images.

but I had problems dealing with your short sentences. They are everywhere and force short breaths from the reader. It's OK if you try it for effect - fear or excitement - but all the time? For me, it interfered with my full enjoyment of a very well written, loving story, unlike the porno vignettes we often get as a matter of course. Keep at it and vary your sentence lengths!

Read both submissions, please continue.U

more realistic than most on the genre... because there's built in of excitement, tempered by fear; love by sorrows, and so on.... and there's actually decently developed background to the story...

The construction of the plot, and the flow of the story is perfect. With the characters well defined,, and with the foundation of the story well in place, made the whole story very believable. Love, lust and incest makes for a highly erotic story to start with, but the author brought out more than just the usual emotions into this story. Well Done!!!! Thanks for the very enjoyable read, and if the author would like to continue with this story, I'm sure it will be with the same excellence as the one is.Thank You for the good work.

I really like the mother-son,nephew-aunt relationship.how sad...sara died.

I see that the "Soldier's Story" is narrated by Terry Sr while this one is from the perspective of Terry Jr. Both stories are beautiful tales of incest & impregnation; keep up the good writing!

love the story, definately keep writing. I would love to see where you take it.

Not enough dialogue. You should let your characters engage each other in conversation. As it is written, it comes across as being to stilted; too one-sided; too contrived; un-damned-believable! Use a more descriptive voice next time.

First off, it was a wonderful read. I could see the potential from the start. However, The story sounded more like an essay than a story. there was not enough dialog to make it a story, and it did not do enough to convey just the side of the man to make it an essay. Tip the scales one way or the other, and you would have a much better received story.

I gave it three stars. Keep wirting

Continue please

Please continue i honestly enjoyed this story and am curious on weather or not the other family members accept them as well.

Call me a geek, but all throughout the story, I couldn't get the phrase "My Dear Aunt Sally" out of my head, especially when they were being fruitful and multiplying.

Please, write more on this story. It is really GREAT!!!

Thank you.

You have done such a great job on both A Soldier's Story and this one, I would hate to see this collection end. It really got me during the closing of A Soldier's Story when you wrote that Rachael died, but this was a bit of sunshine for your characters after reading that. Thanks for the great story and I truely hope there is more to come.

i feel the same way i really hope you come out with another story to add to these collection great body of work

Man, not sure I want to read the next installment. At the end of the first one, Rachel dies; at the end of this one Sarah dies. Does that mean at the end of the next one Terry or Terry jr. or Sally or God forbid one of the kids will die? But for the fact of Sarah dying, I loved the story. And again, pay no attention to the negative Nellie's about short sentences, etc. If they don't like it, no one if holding a gun to their head making them read it. Well done.

I loved the sory. though it will be much better if they didn't marry others of have sex with others.

Don't need any followup if that include swapping/swinging/polyandry.

just pure committed monogamous love of terry & sally.

Why terran & sarah never hared their secret with sally & terry?

I glad you followed through with the story. But, I would have suggested that Sarah told Sally and Terry the secret of their parents.

You certainly like killing off your characters in your stories that for sure. I’ve only read two of your stories so far I’m wondering if the next story will there be a massacre. 😂😂..anyway ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️. Great stories both of them...

I loved both storylines except killing off the Rachel and Sarah characters. Well it appears that bmunchausen is no longer writing on Lit since the last story was published in November of 2014 so I guess that he won't be writing a sequel to this. Such a shame that writers like bmunchausen who have the talent stop publishing stories like this on Lit. At any rate it gets my 5 star vote

This was just a poorly written story all the way through couldn't keep up with it first the plot went 1 way then another back to the other it seemed you couldn't make up your mind on how you wanted to write this story so you added different plots in the middle of a story which is something you never do any good writer knows this I am not going to started on all the errors and misspelled words

@rancher46 I'm not sure you know the meaning of talent cause there was nothing talented about the writing of this story it 1 story with different story lines that didn't follow the same plot you couldn't keep up with it the different ways the story was going any talented writer knows you can't do that in a story then you have all errors involved in it proves the writer needs to take a writing course to cut back on the errors I mean it seemed that every other word was either misspelled or used out of context if you call that talent then I say you need to go back to school as well to learn what real talent is

It seems to me I've heard this song before1 And I still rate it CINCO ESTRELLAS!

5* all the way. Loved the story.