All Comments on 'A Perfect Mate Ch. 02'

This makes no sense. Mate or not you don't fuck the man who killed your boyfriend less than 24 hours ago.Please, rethink this whole story

You think that in reasonable stories women don't turn around and marry their lovers' murderers?

Tell it to the author of Hamlet.

ideas are good, needs to be edited by an English speaker, just for flow and word usage

Obviously she didn't care about her ex you idiot. Go back and re-read the first chapter

The girl is a cheap slut and has no morals whatsoever. As I remember, Luca did love her andshe treated him very badly. Hopefully what goes, comes around her way. Besides that I do like both Weres and Vampires and am not too enthusiastic, when they have to fight one another because the author says so...

Keep writing, I think you have something that could be a really good story. :)

Men om jag får ge lite konstruktiv kritik så är det att inte gå för fort fram i storyn. Ta dig tid att bygga karaktärerna lite. Varför hur och så vidare. Annars bör du vara stolt över att du har en novell här. Som du skrev svenska och engelska är inte samma. ;) kram E

for a couple of different reasons. First, I had no idea that English wasn't your first language. The mistakes you have made are very common w/people who speak only English so don't let that bother you. Yes an editor might be nice but don't give up writing if you aren't successful in find one. Secondly, are you going to add some conflict into your story. Maybe she finds out what they did to her "boyfriend" or do you have something else in mind? I will be watching for chapter 3 to see where you take the story next.

Please keep writing, I would love to read more

Keep writing.

Please write more. I'm already in love with the story!

enjoyed reading564A

Love this story.