All Comments on 'A Photo Shoot with Her Mom'

Learn English before you make any further attempts

There was absolutley ZERO character development in this "story" and the author can't even spell "orgasm". I did not even both to finish reading by the second time I saw the awful mis-spelling.

Get spellchecker and and someone to proof your work

but such poor execution!

Twenty eight paragraphs that begin with the word "I". No character development, no link to the title within the story, nothing I saw to make me care about the characters at all. IMO.

How you could even think, in the most convoluted corners of your peabrain, that this would be worth the time of anyone, anyone over the age of two, is mind bending.

'orchasm'????

Very poorly done. No character development and no story line at all. Take a few writing lessons and get a spell checker!

Awful Bad,bad,Bad,Bad

You write like Michael Schumacher...and thats NOT a compliment...

pathetic story...

Psst...maybe you should retire too...

want to hear what else happens on the weekend

Ok so where in the story did you let us know that Tammy was the ex girlfriends mom? was there a part 1 that we didn't see? Did I miss it?

After I read “He didn’t even bring you to orchasm” I couldn’t read anymore