All Comments on 'A Request for Advice'

2nd line in the 2nd paragraph ruined the entire story... When will people learn to PROOF READ?? "waste-band"??? Gimme a break. "Waste" is something you get rid of but "waist" is the part of the body near the belly-button or navel (as opposed to the commonly used naval).

Grammatical purist...

Try "piqued"

Other comments as already noted.

This could have been an OK read, but spelling and grammar made it quite the opposite.

If you want to grade grammar, then go be a teacher. Mikeinto, good story. If you would like some constructive criticism, I would say that you need more descriptive detail. You rush over the action. Make it more intense, linger over the details. Pull in your audience. Again, good job, and keep it up.