by SouthCoastSurfer
Truly a great story, the atmosphere was amazing and you had me enthralled with every word!
I'm most definatly amazed!
this is great writing , I can't believe the author is not a professional
brilliantly written in present, great storyline with twists and turns, the inn at the crossroads and mercurial theme, very erotic; hope it does really well
This reminded me of the original "Devil in Miss Jones." The porn flick where the virgin was sexualized by the devil only to be then tormented by her own sexuality. It was good but I'd almost like to see it taken a little further than this. This is the story we already know - what we've already seen and/or read before in other versions and tellings. I'd kind of like to know what happens when she goes back and has to make changes to live. Can she survive without him, without them? Does she tempt or trick others to satisfy her needs & tastes or does she slowly waste away? Just kind of curious. I think it would've been interesting to see where it would've gone *after* this.
Beautifully written, very atmospheric and refined.