by MsGinger77
There is nothing wrong with your story. Keep writing please.
Wrongly capitalized words. Also, the clit does not "expel juices". Sorry.
Too distracted by the lack of grammatical rules (take a look at how language is structured) to be carried away into horniness. Stilted language ... pick up a good grammar manual and go from there.
I hope you'll continue writing about them and see where your mind takes them. I think he really is fond of her. I hope to see a Valentine day story about them.