All Comments on 'A Stalled Car'

would love to turn a str8 guy over

Wish it were me in the drivers seat .Your story really turned me one .Write more soon .

This totally turned me on. And was very much like my first time too. The excitement, the incredible stiffness, the feeling of control - and the cumming so hard in a guys mouth. Or having him in my mouth - giving him my best, slightly being controlled. It is & was just unbelievable to me. So much better than a gal. Wish I could find scott...and his dick to suck --- and his mouth to suck mine...over and over. ANL!

I would love for you to work an me and swallow all my loads.

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The blowjob descriptions were good, but the writing of the whole piece was stilted and awkard. If you intend to do more writing,.I'd suggest you get a writing coach or join a writers group to get some helpful criticism.

Wonderful story - erotic, sensual, male and believeable as only a well-written true story can be. Ignore your anonymous ciritcs in previous posts (who have probably never written a thing themselves or for that matter, experienced anything close to what you have described so well) and give us more of these types of stories in the future!

I AM a writer and I won't critique a story without divulging my name (my pen name), DesertMac. I even have a story here on Literotica, Bobby's Tale--- I'm not plugging my story, just showing that I actually am a writer, too. I thought this story was pretty good. The author put a lot of thought into it and the concept was pretty hot. He writes his thoughts out coherently and with a good flow, good syntax and good imagery.

What may have bothered the critic was the beginning. You started us with an adrenaline rush about a frantic situation but never expanded the story to explain the setup, even after your protagonist admitted at the end that he'd orchestrated the setup. You could have given us a quick synopsis of the situation Scott had manufactured either at the beginning or at the end and it would have made the story that much better.

With reams of poorly written and conceived stroke stories here and elsewhere, I am perplexed and irritated that this anonymous critic chose this story to trash. This one is far hotter and better written than the majority of them.

So, Dreamingofblowing, don't pay any attention to the anonymous critic and don't let him get you down. Keep writing and always strive to improve. I got a boner while reading it, so you succeeded.

That was so nice of you to take time to offer your positive encouragement to dreamingofblowing - I really do agree with you - I liked this story - easy enough to offer negative feedback when you are anonymous. Keep up with the great stories there dreamingofblowing.

I can relate to your story. Like you, I was as straight as they come. I loved pussy, and never hjad had any thoughts of sex with a man. I had accen

dently walked into a gay bar. I thought it was a sports bar, To make a long story short, I allowed myself to be picked up by a gay man. We went to his house The rest is pretty much the same same as what happened to you. After I had sucked his cock and he had cum in my mouth, I could not get enough of him. All this happened while I was out of town on a business trip. I stayed with him for the two weeks I was there. After about 5 days, he asked if he could fuck me. Relunctiately, I agreed and found that I loved that also. The second week I was thre, I sucked cock and fucked. That was 19 yrs ago and I have not been with a woman since.

I can relate to what you're saying -- that once you try sucking cock you can never stop. That's what happened to me. Once I started sucking cock I couldn't get enough. Then I kissed men and now I get fucked. Keep up the good writing.

Fuck that was so hot

damn I need you in my car....

Oh how I need Scott in my life, I need his beautiful COCK in my eager mouth so so much.

Good trick, wish I had a few friends like that.

Isn't it amazing!. Many of us fantasize for years what it would be like to suck a cock. Once we have actually done it, most of us want to do it 24/7. For me, nothing is more enjoyable than taking a soft penis in my mouth, making love to it until it turns in to a rock-hard raging cock and fills my mouth with sweet, sweet cum. A guy I serviced for many years once told me, "If they had an Olympic event for 'cocksucking', you would win Gold every time." That was a compliment I'll always cherish.

I luv it when they say my name when they are about to cum !

CS in TN