by WildaRaven
At that point I quit reading and changed my mind about giving the story the highest mark and gave it the lowest
The content of this story was very very good, BUT....Your spelling, punctuation and inadvertent capitalization distracted the reader from enjoying it thoroughly. This was too bad, because it really was a "100" story.
The idea of this story is good, but all the mistakes in grammer, spelling and punctuation distracted from the story itself. Either print it out and proof it yourself or ask someone else to proof it for you before you post. You have potential!
Either you are very young or have had no formal education. It may have been very erotic, but I could only read a few lines before I lost interest trying to interpret your meaning. I have seen better grammer etched in cave walls. Intelligence is erotic to me and I found none here.
While I generally agree, I am amused by the two comments complaining about spelling and "grammer"
It is "grammar". Learn to spell yourselves before criticising others!
Two couples swing together as old friends taking it to the next level. Don - Denny - Wilda and Mandy explore their wild side with gusto once the ice is broken. Did someone mention mistakes in Grammar? WOW! I must have missed them! *laughs*
Terrific Write! Graphic Descriptions were well described. Thrilling Read!
Wilda, fuck all of these dumbass critics! This is a hot, wet, story of good, hot sex! Michael
we all make mistakes - takes a bit of pedantry to go to brother gates to get a spell check and come back here - all inspiration gone - Wilma you write very well - snappy - amusing and quirky stories not too common here - credible personae and dialogue - husband is a bit of a jerk but am sure you will change him often -
she is clearly into it herself - these are not phantasies of the frustrated -
Many thanks - Bravo
I loved this but it needs sorting out, needs someone to read and get it right this could be a real winner if that was done