All Comments on 'A Strong Relationship Ch. 04'

You waste too much space describing a character over and over again in the same way. Once the reader's told that somebody is "a nineteen year old beauty," that's enough. Don't keep reminding us over and over of the same thing.

By the way, "The pair loved hearing each other having sex, it was one of their perverted kinks." is a bloody awful sentence. Either it's perverted or it's kinky. "Perverted kink" sounds like something from from a satire. And, why do you think that act was "perverted"? Look up the meaning of the word and then remember you're writing a story on Literotica. Liking to hear themselves make love? How awful!