by giltmirror
I almost liked the story until it took a quick turn, classic brother falling in love with the bitchy stepsister whilst ditching the real sister. To hell for fictional characters with Lukas. The tag should av been cheap drama.
Damon claiming not to remember her, so who for all these years have been sending her sweets, he may not remember her face but should know why he's sending stuff through the post
this story is too random for my liking
introduction of characters and plots seem all too over the place. What's the plot? Treason? I think you have to work more on creating links between the characters their motivation in the story. thank u
I never comment but this story is really good. Please keep writing.
This story is quite fascinating and fairly original. If you decide to take it up again, I'm more than happy to edit for you at no cost. :)
This story definitely deserves to be finished. Won't you please bring it to a satisfying end?
I've been waiting for a year to read more of this great tale. It is obvious there is so much more.
Hopefully you finish this story! The brother is so irritating.. I want to know what happens!!!
This is such a great story, please find it in yourself to finish it and don't leave us hanging! I really really really want to know what happens!
Oh you tease...please write some more. I would love to see what you had planned for Damon.
This story is wonderful so far, and I keep checking back for updates. Please, please update us and continue with the tale soon.
Just curious, but will the next chapter come out soon? I really like the story so far, but I want to know what's next. Pleeeeeease. *begging*
You have woven such a wonderful tale and I can't wait to see what happens next. The bracelet is a great idea. I think maybe he really is a good guy deep down and has never forgotten the one true love in his life. And what of Ysabel? Will she admit the pull she feels for Damien? So many questions I can't wait for the next chapter!
really great but it was too short I need to know what happens next haha
Thank you very much for the update. I do hope you continue and finish this story.
Was expecting a longer chapter this was a teaser but a good one.
Incredible read, as entertaining as any published fantasy novel I've read.
Ok, so that was a twist I wasn't expecting! I can't believe Lukas has been lying to her about so many things over the years and all is revealed within a 24hr period, and why is everyone so sheepish about telling her why Damon is still wearing her bracelet? You sure know how to weave an interesting tale. Please update soon I can't wait to find out what happens next!