All Comments on 'A Victorian Lord Ch. 02'

I really liked this story. Glad it ended well. I hope to read more from you in the future.

...very diffcult to follow as you jump about. I do like your turn of frase but you still need to clean up your editting. However there is more story here and pratice does make perfect, you do need to have a better idea of where you are going. And again you've moved the story to fast for it to be enjoyable. Mary comes across as a foolish and empty headed "strumpet" ( I do like that word) But again you are using lanugage that was out of date for the Victorian era. But do try again and perhaps a good editor will help.