All Comments on 'Adding Risk to Swimming'

There was not enough teasing.

You're really quite talented. Love to see more of the swimming stuff, but the girl/girl stuff is great too.

And again a wonderful short story describing the normal life of an ordinary person. Doesn't sound very exiting plotwise. But how it's told - first class. Thank you for the read. Continue svp!

Love the swimming story - Would love another one maybe her losing - i'd keep the second bit out - still enjoyed it aswell - love it

Loved the swimming section - how about another one? As the previous commenter says, the second half seems out of place.

loved the tease in you.....

I would love to read more about the girls and guy at the pool.

This had the feel of 2 different stories jammed together. I'd suggest that the swimming story and the girl/girl tracks be handled separately.

That being said, I enjoyed the story (stories) quite a bit. Keep writing!