All Comments on 'After Bar'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
KKKKKKK

Kris,Ken, Kim,kiss. I got lost half way through and gave up, couldn't you have thought of other names

don87654don87654over 16 years ago
Great. and very natural

preg?

Alvaron53Alvaron53over 16 years ago
Reminded me of Special K

I'm with anonymous below. The passel of K's made for an annoying, extended alliteration, rendering the prose hard to read. Decent enough stroke story but that was irritating. Thank you for your effort.

AnonymousAnonymousover 16 years ago
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i agree, the names got too confusing....the sex was good but i gave up with reading it and just skimmed

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