All Comments on 'After Hours'

This story has been reviewed in the New Story Reviews on the Author's Hangout of Lit Forums.

This story shows real promise. Although in places the flow of the narrative is a bit clumsy or a bit jerky (and there are several grammatical errors - get an editor), there are some lovely turns of phrase such as the central character having 'the same gait' as the Good Witch of Oz.

There's not much tension in the story - everything is too free and easy - but it's still highly erotic. The story is drenched in sex and sexuality right from the opening phrase and the characters (especially Miranda) are so happily uninhibited.

Keep on writing!