All Comments on 'Afternoon Delight'

Wish people would use some imagination---Shorter paragraphs would also help

Despite the inevitable "Anonymous" so glibly dismissing your effort by making the usual deprecating remarks about a sexual predilection shared by many of us, I thought your storyline was quite exciting. "Anonymous" did have a point about the structure but then again, none of us are perfect and it's only a case of taking note and applying the constructive element of his/her criticism to future writing. So, please do - keep writing. And as for "Anonymous", please understand that you do not have to read submissions which are so boring to you, particularly when their content is so readily indicated by their category.

Good imagination and fairly strong, if crude imagery. Work on your paragraphs and phrasing, but kudos for style!

Problems with stories are they are subjective, personally I thoroughly enjoyed it and thought the apprehension she showed would be a natural reaction. Very enjoyable read, dont let the negative comments put you off!

But real men with their manhood intact won't like it at all. It's crap.

Some men who are not WIMPS like to let their wife have a fantasy which is usually 2 men just like us guys would like to try 2 women. I have let my wife live out her fantasy and that does not make me a WIMP, it just makes me better than all of these other guys who complain about these stories. I found it very hot to watch my wife getting taken as she lay on her back and he entered her. She just about cum from that and then she gave me some attention until like your story he was giving it to her real good. To see him cum in my wife and see the expression on her face was something I will never forget. Great job and keep writing.

Well done. You will have your share of negative comments from those who don't have the same fantasies or desires. Don't worry about them. Obviously as you read these stories and see the themes on multiple sites, many people share this fantasy. I enjoyed it and thank you for sharing it.

"rocks off"! <str8 female here>. keep writing!

I will always score any story I read. I'm not into wife sharing stories, avoid reading them and will (almost) always mark them down. Your teaser was ambiguous enough that I gave it a try, read the first 5 or so paras, didn't like it, so marked it down. If the teaser had been clearer I wouldn't have read it. Rgds, emmsea.

The next time they fuck you will be at work and won't get to watch and jack off. Bummer!

time.

How is it that so many new writers start off with self induced pathetic male humiliation? One handed typing or just sick numb jaded wimpy minds.<P>

The lack of self respect must excite some but the reality is some assholes actually give up their manhood to wimpily pimp out their wife to watch her get higher than she ever will with her cuck. So they both lose in the short and long run.<P>

Then she will want more cocks and he can't say no anymore as he selfishly wants to watch plus he can't get it up anymore otherwise. She will eventually laugh at his cuckish sick needs with the men he selects to pimp her out to.<P>

How sad your path writer - you need help if this is the bestest excitement you could feel.

Couples who have done it only know how it feels. My husband has watched me do it twice - both of us thoroughly enjoyed it. Infact I have not gone and slept with others ( like someone has commented) cheating him. I dont intend doing such things

What a great first story. I agree just because a guy lets his wife live out a fantasy doesn't make him a wimp. I loved it when my wife did our best friend and me. He was going through a rough time and she gave us both amazing blowjobs .... deep throat and swallowing. She is a wonderful woman and lover. She then brought a friend home from work so I could live out my fantasy of two women.

Anyway keep up the good work.

Thanks! Hope you continue writing..

I love the lady's comment who has done it 2wice while her wimp watches.<P>

To balance fucking around on your spouse now you get to watch him fuck his girl friend or a stranger. Whoops - cmon now - whats fair for 1 is a balance for this swell marriage.<P>

Now if he doesn't want to fuck anyone else - you sweetie really have a sick bastard on your hands. Dump him now before he really sickens you with his pathetic self cucking, pimping and watching.<P>

A cuck is a weak sick excuse for a man who no one respects - least of all himself. Nothing worthwhile to write about there - unless the sick subhuman fetish excites you.<P>

How pitifully sad.

Well written and a nice change up from this type of story. Please keep writing.

it was bad. Keep going!

Well done, I really liked your story! It is just too hot when you get your wife to do such kind of things :-)

Let's bring a stranger in and let the whore wife fuck him while our kids are in the house. They probably already know she is a whore.

I lose interest immediately when the story starts with "36C breasts." Anytime someone has to focus on breast sizesignals that story is pure fucking without any plot or development. I did skim through quickly, nevertheless, and confirmed.