by TE999
so i totaly love ur stories and i love he idea of the two stories coming together plus the fact that each woman respected the other but i do not like that their was a part where Alexis and Anita were having sex and than outa nowhere it was penny's name that was confusing af
I found it impossible to really believe this one. The characters seem almost entirely interchangeable, and lack any real nuances. There's no hesitance, no jealousy, no possesiveness, no qualms about leaping into bed with these strangers, no loyalty... it's just too much too swiftly. Something like this, one feels it needs to build, and you want to see a real range of emotions, not just full on constant lust. When the two are surprised in the hotel room by their counterparts, one expects a little guilt and uncertainty, at least for a few moments.
Wow, that was rushed and there seemed to be very little development. 4 women meet on the street and move in together that day? I'm sorry but it doesn't work for me.