All Comments on 'All In A Night's Work Ch. 01'

This is a story I wrote after reading about white slavery.

It was one of the fastest written story I ever did.

I've got Part II about half written. Hope to have it done soon

Rob Conners

Merry Christmas

Rob

This was the for real stuff man. Didn't miss the explicit sex at all. The only thing I've done that even comes close is the unposted, uncut Part 3 of Raylene. I wonder how she would have looked and felt if he let her live but realized that she was so close to the life that she dreamed about and in the end he faded into the night?

Nice guys finish last? Don't believe the hype! What the ignorant and foolish forget is that after the assholes have done their worst they never do what the nice guy does. FINISH!

Damn good story

Read ya later

Bishop

You write the most realistic stories. Even though this one is a little bit out there, I beleive that most cuckolded husbands would take this type of action if they could. I don't believe that most men are forgiving wimps as portrayed in most stories. Your writing is a breath of fresh air.

but it sure beats all those wimpy husband stories! I can't imagine what you have stored in for us in the second part. Hope you post it soon.

Thanks!

Maybe it's the break in the monotony from all the sex stories, maybe because I was pissed off at work while I read it but that was awesome. Keep up the good work!

A possible explanation is that jb didnt kill her .

Pat Murray

Atlanta,Ga

Poor widdle thug got his itty-bitty feelings hurt?

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His ego gets hurt, and he kills her, then can't even admit to his buddy that he did it deliberately. By fucking her one last time, he proved she was right and that she was only a piece of meat to him. She was better off dead than with a sociopath like ol' JB.

Great no holds barred writing. Take us over that cliff!!!

Sounds like the intro into a good action movie. Can't wait to hear the next scene.

The bitch needed to learn "you play, you pay". She paid. Too bad so sad. Next

We all wish we could become the superhero and win the good fight lol

here comes the sun. TK U MLJ LV NV

I read part 2. This story is crap. There is no reconciliation possible yet you force it. I wish I could rate it lower than 1*.

Had I walked into my house to what Brady had, Bruno would have just signed his Death Certificate...and so would Carol/Sweet Thing. And I do know how to disappear. In fact, it is in my mind to do so. Super fantastic story. I wish I could give you at least a hundred stars!

Why you turned this into a RAAC went against everything you wrote, just a big huge 1*** for this waste...

Yes everything is turning to crap then the God In the Machine shows up and saves the day. Lazy writing. Surely you can devise a better plot than this!

Liked it. A lot.

Oh, mercy. This writer is stuck on stupid. It's easy to write a BTB when you bring this made-up super killer who has supernatural powers, unlimited funds, and no morals. Oh, brother...