All Comments on 'Allison's Ankle'

no way a broken ankle would keep you bed ridden i know people that had a broken ankle and kept working doing repair work. and as far as the love part goes no way in hell would he want to be near her after what she did. all in all a total waste of his time, our time and the sites space. this should have been put in the round file( trash can for those that don't know).

This is only your second story I have read, but I read them both in a manner of hours! its spectacular!! and as for the comment below me you'd think that a dumb ass construction worker could find a better use of his time then diagnosing whether or not a broken leg would keep you bed ridden for a month, which also dear anonymous you should realize that even though the title of the story " Allison's Ankle" it is not just her ankle that is broken, if you are going to judge a writer before you even have the common sense to read the damn story, you are not welcome here at literotica

Wonderful story , keep writing

Awesome, I loved it.

okay so you read the story,but don't you realize that not everything needs to be perfect. do you just randomly read things to see if their factually correct? you don't know what going on in people's minds,so you don't know if that person would actually do something.you wouldn't that's what you know. also all broken/sprained anything are different to certain degrees, so just because the approximate time is something doesn't mean that it's the actual time for something to heal. not to mention everything heals differently. that is all

An ankle fracture along with a leg fracture (with screws in the bones and a long leg cast) require bedrest and much care. As a former Navy Corpsman and a nurse for over 40 years I know this type of injury. You are so full of BS it is running out your ears. I read for entertainment, why do you read? So you can jump on real or imaginary small errors?

I loved this story, it was romantic, genuine feelings shown, some funny parts and some really good scenes. Way to go, scouries. Keep up the good work.

Great story that kept my interest throughout.

Well-developed, with a great ending. I would have enjoyed some more sexual details, but I was satisfied with what the story provided.

I liked the story.... I'm sure most mothers would have a fit... But it's a story... Enjoyed it a lot...

You tell a good tale. That's why you are one of my favorite authors.

hope to see the sexual encounters last longer because it would make the stories a lot better

Now this is my kind of story, long, well-developed, and focused on the romance and build-up of sexual tension instead of sex 24/7. The ending is lovely as well, though I am not too comfortable with your usage of deus ex machina to resolve the hypotenuse of the relationship.

Well written with humour,good taste and sensitivity. More of the same please!

great job!! beautiful story!!

I really did enjoy it, but i felt it jumped around a little to much. the plot held its own though. it still was very good.

I thought the story was well written, developing slowly to a nice end.

Thanks for writing.

This is the most endearing, sexy, wonderful story that I have read in my 81 years. GREAT!!

Congrats sir. You do it so well

why do they allow unrealistic garbage like this on the site? no way in hell would he willingly help her, if forced to help he would get as many of her freinds to stay with her as possible. he sure wouldn't wash her or sleep in the same room or look at old pictures. the only way this could get rave reviews is for the writer to post them himself or pay for them the writer should be ashamed of himself for posting this in any area other than the NONEROTIC area.

Your argument is unrealistic garbage...

Fantastic story scouries! Keep up the good work. :)

This is a story dip shit so why does it have to be realistic, I thought it was one of the best on this site. Very erotic,thankyou,i love your stories.

Shame about the racism, good story otherwise.

Very believeable, great reading, keep up the good work.

Thank you for writing.

please jim keep up the great writing you are doing i simply am one of your now greatest fans loved it gave it a 5

Too often on this sight I see storys that are rushed and are one page disasters. This was not rushed making it more suspensful and exciting

I loved every paragraph of this amazing story. Great romance dynamic. So many times stories lack romance and rely on sex alone. You have done an impecable job in having both in a well balanced story. You are a very talented author,and I can't wait to see what's next.

Your writing is nearly flawless. My only comment on this story is in regard to the fact that I'm a vet.

I, too, have lived through the unfaithful wife thing; and to have found it in this story was distasteful to say the least. Perhaps the use of a civilian contractor status for her husband would have reduced the pain of memories best left to rest in their shallow grave for those of us who have served and been served.

Congratulations!

then to fall in love all over again.....loved the fun and banter that went on between them especially when he had to carry the potty out and then giving her a bed bath and so it was they ended up fucking even though her limp dick hubby was out saving the world....just a pity he got blown up but it saved a lot of heartache and then the new identity thing seemed a bit bizarre...too much ID theft goes on today...but here it was for a good reason......vice is nice but incest is best and a nice change for it to be between a brother and sister......

..........& the dumb cheating whore.

They & the kid are gonna pay for their indiscretion.

'nuff said.

Beautiful!!!

Loved it. Nice ending in some ways but awful with the loss of a young soldier in a distant country

Bravo! I am not a fan of the cheating on the military man part though. Life sometimes just does get messy. Great story overall! :) I give it 5 stars.

This story is still outstanding. I find that as I reread some stories for a second time after several years of consuming incest stories that many of the no longer hold up for me. I guess that I have become more sophisticated over time. Your stories don't fall into that category, though.

This so damn good I have shared this story with so many people

Loved the siblings' banter and interaction - very natural and endearing. Have read it three times, and I still find it as well-written as the first time! Good job. Ignore the negatives. Can't please everyone.

you are an exellant writer.please keep writing your stories.you have a passion for writing stories that people will actually read.

There is no love more special than siblings ... having four sisters of my own can tell you it is very easy to fall helplessly in love with one's sister(s). Your writing is excellent and your talent for letting a story build slowly is wonderful, it is seldom found when reading erotica ... most stories are just "Slam-Bam-do-It-Again" stories with no depth or humor. Thank You for sharing your imagination and skills, I can't wait to read more from you.

Having on my favorites both authors and stories I have a tendency to reread your stories on a regular basis . I really find this an excellent story . I laugh and cry throughout .

I gave it a 5***** rating the first time I read it and my opinion hasn't changed as of yet .

Thanks again for a fine read

TX CRACKER

Great story from the start . Too bad you didn't make it ch.1 , it has the potential to be extended much further to show what a great life they and their children could have .

I really enjoy your work. Since you haven't submitted any work for a good long while, I don't know if you'll read this. But I just want to tell you that I've really enjoyed this story and almost all of your work. I don't think another chapter would be fitting here. I think that the story of their love has been well told. I'll have to say that I've read pretty much this same story elsewhere. The sister is injured, rope burns to hands and a leg. The brother nurses her as the mother obviously has something more important to do. He washes her, shaves her. They talk of their history and love lives. He performs cunnilingus, something the husband or ex had never done. They make love and she is pregnant. They build a life together. Very similar to your story here. Who wrote it first doesn't matter or why. Different people live similar lives all over the world everyday. Alli really doesn't do right by her husband here, as he isn't cheating on her, isn't putting his work ahead of her, really isn't doing anything wrong and is away on deployment not of his choosing. But ultimately they did not belong together anyway. Please come back, if you can, and give us some new material to enjoy.

As always what a great story I can't wait to read the next one

Slow, gentle and very touching.

I really enjoyed, well worth 5 stars !

Great read. Some criticism:

Get your technical and grammatical skills up. Your plurals are incorrect.

Clean up your time line.

The difference between woman and women is vast. Always check which one fits where.

The ability to correctly place an apostrophe is hugely underrated. It would be great if you could also place more commas in your sentences.

Maybe it COULD use a LITTLE proofreading, but it really is good anyway. I think your epilogue has wrapped up this story very well. No real need for another chapter to extend this out. The story is about a brother and sister getting together again after she has injured herself. It has been told and also a little of their life together afterwards. The funeral, the marriage, change of name, etc. has all been dealth with. This is good storytelling like most of your works. Don't write another chapter, you'd mess it up.

I've only gotten started reading your stories.

They've all been good,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.

Slow build up, very touching, great twist at the end.

All in all, a very good tale !

Thank you. Your stories always make me feel good. I don't worry about the details. I just want to be happy at the end. You help make my problems go away for a while and that is a good thing. Thanks again.

Allison's Ankle is a very good read. I will read it again. Keep up the very good work.

I love sibling love stories. This one was brilliant and brought a tear to my eye. I just wish it was longer, maybe a bit more buildup. Other than that, I loved it!

loved it again, second read.

Thank you

Loved the story. Will is a great care giver and brother-turned-lover. If he shaves her pussy, I hope he leaves his own hairy pubes alone. I'd even like to see a bit of chest hair for the young man. A really sexy site on a young man!

I loved it. It brought a tear in my eye and warmth to my heart. I really did love it.

The first half was bad. I didn't like how he simply ignored what his sister did. He was supposed to be angry but it never showed! I understand what he did was wrong but the way she reacted was simply unforgivable! Entire colony? That kind thin simply destroys a young man's life! yet it never showed! The flow was more like the generic "Two moderately friendly siblings who suddenly realize they are attracted to each other and then do something about it" kind of story with awkward/meaningless fight-start. Nonetheless, the writing was good and with better planning it could have been better. What I would have liked was a really pissed off(in quite 'I am not talking to you' kind of way) brother who only goes there because he owes his mother so much(like he said) and a somewhat guilty sister who tries to make up for the 4 years of stubbornness all while fighting her own stubborn nature. That would have made a much more plausible and interesting story! Good job any ways and do write some more stories with lesser plot-holes(I know it is an erotica site but still...)

J. Jamie Dupane

I did not like cheating on a fellow in Iraq. Been there twice myself and know the horrors that our government ask of us. I wasn't on the front lines because I was an ICU nurse, but I saw more than I wanted to and ducked more rocket and mortar attacks than I ever want to see again. It was no where near as bad a World War 2, Korea or Vietnam, but it was still bad so I still cry a lot.

I read most your stories. I like when either mom, sis or aunt gets pregnant. Even though I understand that children from incest are either physically or mentally deformed, but just the idea is exciting. Keep it up.

I loved the story, but if you want some feedback, I would liked to have seen this story dragged out a bit more, more teasing as they worked up to making each other come, and then full sex. You could have played with her semi-helpless situation and inhibitions and his initial restraint and supposed grudge for a while.

Jim hope you can still read this, I'm just an old romantic I guess but this story gave me a tug. Good work!

Thanks for the great read.

You know what turned me off is when you also narate their other sexual encounters. Really hate that one. And you also made her cheat on her poor husband.

I love a love story. The funny thing is Romance and Incest stories have the most LOVE stories. I have also found the Romance writers write the best cheating wives stories, because they truely loved their wives before burning them badly. I can't stand a cheater.

I've read this story a few times well I've read all your stories more than once.Of course not the interracial one not my thing.A couple of things I like about your stories are the main guy always has a cock not a little five or six inch pecker.Also they aren't always red heads with milk cow tits.

I have read your stories a few times an would greatly appreciate sequels. This one is a great example , I would love to know more about there lives. You have a way of building characters that people become attached to .

I read almost all your stories. I like the way yo write: simple sentences, small paragraph. Good character development with emotions. Flet like watching a movie.

Keep it up please.

A truly captivating story

I tripped across this story by accident, and I'm glad I did. Finished it, gave it five stars,and added it to my favorites list. Added the author too, in the hopes that he might crank out a few more stories!

My only complaint is shaved pussy. WHY does a woman want to look like a little kid??? Well the problem is most men under 50 are fucking wimps. LOL women have trying extremely successfully taking men masculinity away for 35+ years. I laughed my ass off recently when a woman complained when ready to get married and settle down she wanted a MAN, someone who could take charge and take care of her. Her problem was there are NO men out there only wimps. I laughed my ass off. What women created is sensitive politically correct wimps...men need little girls today NOT women...shaved so they are not intimidated.

Just wish it was a little longer for their love to develop for each other .

I was a bit worried about the married part. Though about as many middle east vets commit suicide as die in battle. So the butchers bill in Iraq and Afghanistan, may never be fully tallied. Anyway, bottom line I liked it very much. Maybe the most of your work.

My favorite

YUK!!! I prefer a woman NOT a little kid. what a WIMP...women intimidate wimps. today boys 45 and under are mostly wimps. women are finally complaining, "There are no men out there!"

The shaving of our pubic area gives the illusion of youth, not only to the man, it helps us feel younger and more able to attract. That is good for the relationship as long as its agreed upon, also the area is more tender and more pleasing to the pallet and easier to keep clean, More men should try it themselves.

almost lost me when he shaved her but you saved it. i prefer bushy women instead of shaved it reminds me of prepubescent girls.

I don’t think about shaving for some guy. I feel cleaner, more comfortable, and my skin feels more sensitive to touch. Even panties feel nice because they lightly touch my skin. Boy shorts also feel nice because I can feel the cloth on my skin and they feel airy.

AND I loved the little brother in this story! He was assertive and funny and took great care of his sister.

What more can I say. another great story, and another under score of five.

I loved every word.

And it had a proper ending too. What more could you want.

Rapier

It was a good story and has enticed me to read more of your work. You also made me realize you do this for your enjoyment and really do "need" some feedback no matter what may be said. My only suggestion is this. The flow is decent through most of the story with just a little bit of fluctuation. Seems to the end you start to rush it. But other than that it was good.

Loved it so very much thank you.

A favorite name of mine Allison. Love the panties and bra at the beginning. The seduction of his sister. Giving her bath's shaving her pussy. Thumbs up !

Outstanding story of love ! Panties and pussy !

Awesome

This needs a continuation. 5 stars.

Well written. Descriptive but not overly so. Really liked it. Realistic

Nice story, but there should be more..

Enjoyed the sponge bath and the shaving parts..

Could have even wrote and worked in the peeing

More then the one time, but over all i enjoyed it very much

Very good story. Not quite a 5 star,but better than a 4. I wish we could use a 1 to 100 scale for accuracy. Then I'd be able to give you the 95 you deserve...{Oh wait,,,I just did.}

Considering I have read hundreds of stories on literotica, I feel justified in saying that you are an excellent writer and you know your audience. Most men don't have time or the patience for long drawn out stories. You get in there, lay down the story, plenty of description, good narrative. Love those incestuous pregnancy stories. Bravo, and may you continue to regale us with your plethora of pregnancies!

You've done a awesome job writing this story. Il be reading more of your work. Great job

Have read seven of your stories now, and this one didn't click with me. Too much day-to-day reality, too much vituperation, and then killing off the sister's husband, off serving his Country in a foreign war. Not much space for the erotic of life. Sorry.

I loved the story. Loved the Romance. Loved the pace. It reminded me a lot of one of your earlier stories 'Emily's Christmas Milk', which happens to be one of my all-time favourites, only not as heavy laden with sexual tension. You added a bit more humour to this one which was great! I will definitely be adding 'Allison's Ankle' to my favourites list. Keep up the good work. Cheers

Since this is supposed to be a 'reality' story rather than some alternate reality, it's impossible to suspend disbelief when it comes to close family members having children. Only an idiot would take the chance that their inbred children wouldn't have some kind of major health problems or defects.

The true nitty gritty of a bro/sis romance, the realisation that true love is blossoming and leading to a happy ending,, makes one feel warm inside. Well written and portrayed, well done.

great

YES she did look like a little girl, a child. WHICH looks STUPID on a woman. EXCEPT to WIMPS. Real women intimidate them.

An excellent story well prepared and written, please allow others to proofread your writing as there are some spelling and grammatical errors.

Women look "stupid" when shaved? How about men? Does that fact that I remove the hair from my chinny-chin-chin make me look like a little boy? What there is of it, I mean; I can't grow a decent beard to save my life. Does that particular quirk of genetics make me less a man? My wife doesn't seem to think so.

Look, I don't care what you prefer -- that's your business. What I do care about is that you feel it necessary to denigrate and insult people who have opinions different than yours. That isn't acceptable in this forum or any other. Don't do it again.

Good

I liked this, a lot. The end felt rushed yet was a complete end. Thank you for your writing!

Ending to this kind of story can't NOT rushed. It's a memoir. But that's what I loved. Amazing work. This format chosen in excellent for conveying a long story and still managing to make it engaging. I am a fellow writer, not on Literotica, but, seriously, I thoroughly enjoyed it.

Poor innocent American boy ? lol

You know he was a soldier who had a hand in killing lots of civilians from the other side. It’s funny how Americans think they are the good ppl here