All Comments on 'Allison's Ankle'

Having on my favorites both authors and stories I have a tendency to reread your stories on a regular basis . I really find this an excellent story . I laugh and cry throughout .

I gave it a 5***** rating the first time I read it and my opinion hasn't changed as of yet .

Thanks again for a fine read

TX CRACKER

There is no love more special than siblings ... having four sisters of my own can tell you it is very easy to fall helplessly in love with one's sister(s). Your writing is excellent and your talent for letting a story build slowly is wonderful, it is seldom found when reading erotica ... most stories are just "Slam-Bam-do-It-Again" stories with no depth or humor. Thank You for sharing your imagination and skills, I can't wait to read more from you.

you are an exellant writer.please keep writing your stories.you have a passion for writing stories that people will actually read.

Loved the siblings' banter and interaction - very natural and endearing. Have read it three times, and I still find it as well-written as the first time! Good job. Ignore the negatives. Can't please everyone.

This so damn good I have shared this story with so many people

This story is still outstanding. I find that as I reread some stories for a second time after several years of consuming incest stories that many of the no longer hold up for me. I guess that I have become more sophisticated over time. Your stories don't fall into that category, though.

Bravo! I am not a fan of the cheating on the military man part though. Life sometimes just does get messy. Great story overall! :) I give it 5 stars.

Loved it. Nice ending in some ways but awful with the loss of a young soldier in a distant country

Beautiful!!!

..........& the dumb cheating whore.

They & the kid are gonna pay for their indiscretion.

'nuff said.

then to fall in love all over again.....loved the fun and banter that went on between them especially when he had to carry the potty out and then giving her a bed bath and so it was they ended up fucking even though her limp dick hubby was out saving the world....just a pity he got blown up but it saved a lot of heartache and then the new identity thing seemed a bit bizarre...too much ID theft goes on today...but here it was for a good reason......vice is nice but incest is best and a nice change for it to be between a brother and sister......

Congratulations!

Your writing is nearly flawless. My only comment on this story is in regard to the fact that I'm a vet.

I, too, have lived through the unfaithful wife thing; and to have found it in this story was distasteful to say the least. Perhaps the use of a civilian contractor status for her husband would have reduced the pain of memories best left to rest in their shallow grave for those of us who have served and been served.

I loved every paragraph of this amazing story. Great romance dynamic. So many times stories lack romance and rely on sex alone. You have done an impecable job in having both in a well balanced story. You are a very talented author,and I can't wait to see what's next.

Too often on this sight I see storys that are rushed and are one page disasters. This was not rushed making it more suspensful and exciting

please jim keep up the great writing you are doing i simply am one of your now greatest fans loved it gave it a 5

Thank you for writing.

Very believeable, great reading, keep up the good work.

Shame about the racism, good story otherwise.

This is a story dip shit so why does it have to be realistic, I thought it was one of the best on this site. Very erotic,thankyou,i love your stories.

Your argument is unrealistic garbage...

Fantastic story scouries! Keep up the good work. :)

why do they allow unrealistic garbage like this on the site? no way in hell would he willingly help her, if forced to help he would get as many of her freinds to stay with her as possible. he sure wouldn't wash her or sleep in the same room or look at old pictures. the only way this could get rave reviews is for the writer to post them himself or pay for them the writer should be ashamed of himself for posting this in any area other than the NONEROTIC area.

Congrats sir. You do it so well

This is the most endearing, sexy, wonderful story that I have read in my 81 years. GREAT!!

I thought the story was well written, developing slowly to a nice end.

Thanks for writing.

I really did enjoy it, but i felt it jumped around a little to much. the plot held its own though. it still was very good.

great job!! beautiful story!!

Well written with humour,good taste and sensitivity. More of the same please!

Now this is my kind of story, long, well-developed, and focused on the romance and build-up of sexual tension instead of sex 24/7. The ending is lovely as well, though I am not too comfortable with your usage of deus ex machina to resolve the hypotenuse of the relationship.

hope to see the sexual encounters last longer because it would make the stories a lot better

You tell a good tale. That's why you are one of my favorite authors.

I liked the story.... I'm sure most mothers would have a fit... But it's a story... Enjoyed it a lot...

Well-developed, with a great ending. I would have enjoyed some more sexual details, but I was satisfied with what the story provided.

Great story that kept my interest throughout.

An ankle fracture along with a leg fracture (with screws in the bones and a long leg cast) require bedrest and much care. As a former Navy Corpsman and a nurse for over 40 years I know this type of injury. You are so full of BS it is running out your ears. I read for entertainment, why do you read? So you can jump on real or imaginary small errors?

I loved this story, it was romantic, genuine feelings shown, some funny parts and some really good scenes. Way to go, scouries. Keep up the good work.

okay so you read the story,but don't you realize that not everything needs to be perfect. do you just randomly read things to see if their factually correct? you don't know what going on in people's minds,so you don't know if that person would actually do something.you wouldn't that's what you know. also all broken/sprained anything are different to certain degrees, so just because the approximate time is something doesn't mean that it's the actual time for something to heal. not to mention everything heals differently. that is all

Awesome, I loved it.

Wonderful story , keep writing

This is only your second story I have read, but I read them both in a manner of hours! its spectacular!! and as for the comment below me you'd think that a dumb ass construction worker could find a better use of his time then diagnosing whether or not a broken leg would keep you bed ridden for a month, which also dear anonymous you should realize that even though the title of the story " Allison's Ankle" it is not just her ankle that is broken, if you are going to judge a writer before you even have the common sense to read the damn story, you are not welcome here at literotica

no way a broken ankle would keep you bed ridden i know people that had a broken ankle and kept working doing repair work. and as far as the love part goes no way in hell would he want to be near her after what she did. all in all a total waste of his time, our time and the sites space. this should have been put in the round file( trash can for those that don't know).

Wonderful story, made even better by the fact that it was a dickless soldier's wife taken from him (and eventually his life too)

I really enjoyed this story. I hope you keep writing.

I like this one alot ....sound real like it really happened

First, I want to thank you for your service. There's no greater American, than a soldier. But you said it well, its just a story about incest. What difference is there that her brother was non-military? Would it have made a difference to you if Johnnie had been a civilian contractor working in Falujah? The author could have had Johnnie come home and kill them both, or come home and become the third, somewhat smaller leg, of a love triangle. I actually laughed, when the author killed Johnnie, because it was the easy wAy out. Life is complicated, and wives cheat on their soldier husbands. If they didn't, our drill sergeants wouldn't have told us that, "Jody's got your girl," in basic training. Hell, we sang it while marching in cadence. So, don't get angry, if this story hits a little too close to reality. Just like the disclaimer says, "Any resemblance to life is purely coincidental, and all the videotapes have been destroyed."

would love to rad what happens next

i am a prior marine who reads literotica on a daily basis and never has a story pissed me off so much. i understand that the story is fictional and is about romance. the cheating on the gaurdsman is so sickening. i have seen my friends come home from Iraq and Afghanistan in one piece only to have their hearts shattered by the woman the loved and trusted. if this woman was someone i knew i would have shot her and her brother. we in the military fight for your god-givin rights to think and act as you will, but to cheat on us? with some non-military fuck no less? i am incredibly steamed over this story.

...another Excellent story!!

Keep writing please ?

Once again, you have written another masterpiece of erotica, scouries! Whoever you are, keep up the excellent writing! 5/5 stars this deserves and more... wish I could give it a bonus of 5 more!

- A fellow writer

When I am in "need" of some good erotica, I say to myself...

"ooooh go find a Scouries story". It always does the job for me! Your writing is for people who share certain kinks...and who are reasonably literate. Great job!

abby

This is another great story. I love a story that has a happy ending. This was an amazing "love" story. Great job.5***** toby9790.

Again it's always a pleasure to read one of your stories. Thank You!!!!

The more I thought about this story, the more I thought the sponge bathing could have progressed a little more slowly. Not sure he would have been so bold right away or that she'd let him be so bold right away. I know the story was long, but ... And I know that's nitpicking. I just usually come down on the side of plausible credibility, even in fiction. But you know I love your work!

I certainly like that you include romance and humor in with the erotica. I love your stories. In this one, however, the parts of the dialog appear to have disappeared. Sentences just end abruptly. Another great story. Sexy and endearing. Thanks.

I read Allison's ankle tonight after concluding the Red headed lawyer story earlier. I have to say you have a flare for writing erotica all tho after reading these two stories I believe your gifted enough to write anything you'd care to write. I hope your continuing with the Doctor's stories with the Asian lady that was mentioned at the end of the red headed lawyer story? You have a way of writing that brings the people to life that your writing about. Keep up the great work looking forward to reading more of your work. Matter of fact I'm on to the next one right now. Thank you again, SR.

minus 1 star for the cuckolding of a soldier, which is despicable, but still four stars for excellent storytelleng, and a well wrapped up ending. One other thing though: the sisters comment about it being "his fault" that she told everyone they knew about his...episode...with her clothing, could have been resolved better. I mean, by my calculations, the kid was fourteen. his big sister should've protectd him, not set out to ruin his life. Other than those two things (and the sister "fault" bit is more nit-picking than anything) it was an excellent tale. It seems you've stopped writing for now, but I look forward to further works, especially of this grammatical, and storytelling, quality.

I love Literotica, but Alison's Ankle is one of the best I've read.

The humor, teasing and love make it seem so real and I do love happy endings.

Please keep writing

That was a good story. I love how there was a happy ending..

I like your work - you write well and there's feeling in your work. Keep it up!

BobM

Thanks Scouries for another great story. You're definitely one of the best authors on the Literotica, I'll be back for more.

I am again mesmerized by your writing talents. This is one of my fave stories on Lit. The plot, the interaction between Allison and Will, the fun conversation combined to make this a great additi0on to the genre. Thanks Jim

Brilliant, absaloutely brilliant. I love the way You drug this one out yet, kept the sexual tension between them. Amazing.

Keep writing!

Like the other story of yours I read, I appreciate the pacing in your stories, Even though the males are perverts. You never jump straight to the sex. Keep up the good work.

a story gentle and loving could read again and again keep up the good work

A really great tale, spread out to make it tasty

Wine is an acquired taste. This story's genre is an acquired reading. Your writing, like fine wine, gets better with age but in this case, better with each work.

Another 5-Star from the great Scouries. My only complaint is that she didn't seem to resist much when he washed her for the first time and fingered her ass. Seems to me that a) he would've been more cautious, waited a few bathings before trying something like that, and b) unless she was already falling for him at that point, she probably would've at least put up some sort of resistance to having her ass fingered by her little brother.

Good, simple, horny read. Keep it going

I had read this story once before. Really liked it then & loved it this time. It has such a nice comfortable flow to it. One of those stories that keep you going till you get to the end, while keeping you emotionally involved.

After reading your latest submission, I thought I would re-read one of your earlier ones.

I did not regret doing so!

It's a very enjoyable, gently erotic tale writen by a literate and talented author.

As for the criticisms in some of the earlier comments:

'It's too long' - It's under two pages! If you have the concentration level of a flea then perhaps you should stick to reading the comments in public toilets!

'The story doesn't make sense - timing is wrong at the end.' - Rubbish! The ending is not sequential but the chronology is perfectly correct. Re-read it and take notes if you must and you'll discover there's nothing whatsoever wrong. A good story does not require to be written for a 3 year old to understand - and if you're that mental or physical age you shouldn't be in here anyway!

'It needs better proofreading' - Ok, perhaps there are a couple of minor errors; but certainly fewer than in the first lines of the complainants' comments - lol. If you are going to write literary criticism, can I suggest that you at least have the decency to do so in language which, in some degree, approaches the standard of literacy that Jim exhibits on a consistent basis.

And yes, I know the last bit was rude but it does feel good to let off steam occasionally.

verry nice love story.thanks

sibling story on this site. A tale full of love, lust and a friendship renewed. The caring actions of a brother toward his loving and beautiful sister that developed into something more meaningful. A must read for anyone needing a renewed faith in the thoughts of love.

Please write more like this so we can all enjoy them.

First, I'm reading Jim's stories because I like to read about incest/taboo. To me, they are generally the most erotic and often have elements of love. Being an only child, I've not had the feelings about a close sibling, but have had similar ones about in-laws and even close neighbors, affairs that if begun would definitely be taboo. I liked this story, and enjoyed the sexual situations that allowed the action to proceed to real sex, lust, and, I suppose, love, although we didn't stay with the two of them to see if the love remained after the lust diminished. Some have said, not realistic, but who cares. These stories on this site are meant to titillate, not to portray real life. If it happens to be true, then that may or may not add to the enjoyment, but again, who cares? And, for those who complain about cheating on an away serviceman, having him conveniently die instead of having to add more unnecessary angst to the story, and criminally assume an other's identity, I say "lighten up." You are reading a type of story that honors incest-taboo acts in most places and illegal, too. What follows is to be expected. I have to admit that I briefly shed a tear at this point "And then on a cool, dusty, early January morning, in a small town seventy miles northeast of Baghdad, a young engineer's life was blown away even as he was working on the construction of a school that could have educated a generation of young Iraqis. His future and theirs both destroyed by some ignorant suicide bomber who thought he'd go to heaven for killing women and children and a poor, innocent American boy." Here the story touched on the realistic, the here and now, and the truth that man must still war against man, and people still die because people can't get along without desiring what others possess. In the story it was a gadget, a means to avoid the "Dear John" confrontation that was not needed to express the lust and conclusion of the main characters. But I still weep for those who volunteer their lives to keep my freedoms alive. I will likely remember this brave man far longer than I remember his wife and her brother, however, I read this story for the sex, and it was all I desired. I'm reading Scouries' stories from A to the last, so I'll be enjoying his style and his incest/taboo for a long time. Thanks for providing such good erotica.

i love your writing and this story is another great example!!!!! i keep digging through to find things i haven`t read at least twice. all the best and please more

If it were possible to give a rating of 10, I would have. Simply the best sibling story I've ever read. No exaggeration.

Everything was great, except that they're fucking while her husband is deployed. Is that necessary? It's not an uncommon plot element, but I'm not sure people appreciate how much it makes veterans feel taken advantage of for being idealistic enough to serve.

Well done Jim a great story full of suspence and intrigue, so real in it's, agony of loving some one who you shouldn't, and a great twist in the tail with mom coming to the rescue with a new identity.

A sensitive story with real feelings portrayed by two siblings thrown together again after a fallout, had me feeling very horny by the first page and positivly gagging for it by the end.

Thankyou for another great story

Chrissie39

...was your portral of the mother & the beautifully sneaky way she "...legalized..." her daughter's "...daughter...". ABSOLUTELY BEAUTIFUL!

and I object strongly to using it in this story for whatever reason it is still criminal. didn't like you killing off her husband neither - the poor schmuck suffered enough - overall a nice idea but lacking

This writing style didn't work for this story. The jumpyness broke things up too much and made it too unbelievable. There is no character developement or developement of the story, the animosity, the realization of attraction, and the cave in. Some how, it just happens. We are to just believe she would allow him to finger her ass the first time he "washes" her, with no complaining? No one washes inside their ass unless they are a germ freak. The whole sponge bath in bed thing just doesn't work. Who the hell sponge bathes in bed? A broken leg that cant have pressure on it...ever hear of a wheelchair? That's just a few examples of many that make this story fall apart. To those that think this sounds so realistic...spend some more time on this site. To the author...several other of your stories are very good...this one doesn't work.

Very good story!

This is thoughly believable and well structured with the dialogue a good way of breaking barriers and creating the important communication between people in love but battling to get through the barriers of hurt and suspicion. My sister and I have both read it - we are great literotic fans. We also had to learn a new language and move countries, change her ID to our late Mom's maiden name, as well as her need to retrain as a teacher to carry on with our lives and what we now have. As siblings, born 18 months apart - she being older - we were thrown together at an early age by an awful accident where both parents and all but one grandparent was killed. We were brought up by a succession of foster parents most of whom who didn't understand our crazy sibling love: well our sort of relationship and knew we would marry each other from the time she was 12 and motivated to spend 10 years working towards that goal. Now, after 15 years, we live a normal life with three boys and a daughter and are far happier than we have ever been had we remained. Fortunately, Europe is a large warm and great conglomoration of big and small nations and therefore people and in this we can get on with our lives without worrying.

I liked it. I think it was honest and believable.

This is exactly my favorite types of story, incest, but with romance. you really showed the love between the characters.

Grast ork my friend keep it up

my broter would kill me me lol if he ever found out what thtos iv had about him

but well done

Your writing is exemplary. If a sequel is to follow, plz consider an anal chapter. True love deserves it!

Best,

Al

Sugarland, Tx

...what a tale! It brought me every aspect of brother-sister incest I would ever want; a bit of animosity, begrudging swing to affection, humorous younger brother, final complete cave-in to their love. Perfect! Wrap this and release the movie!

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UNREALISTIC by anonymous is obviously an only child, nice story , keep them coming.

I loved your story and was very turned on as I read it. I like brother sister love stories where there truly is love and it's not just a matter of hormones. I had trouble with the sis being married and having her husband blown up, as I have some military friends and don't like to picture them hurt or killed in the line of duty. Also, I think that their mourning him was more a guilt/relief thing than actual mourning. (I do love it when a bro steals his sis away from someone who is not right for her.)

You're a helluva writer, Scouries. I read and re-read your stories. Really enjoy them. Many, many thanks!

i've read two others like yours so far. they might have been yours as well..lol, i don't recall at the moment. however, i usually don't read the really long ones, but your was really an exception. wonderful dialogue that wasn't obvious or boring, i kept reading the whole way through. and yeah, thanks for not exaggerating the anatomy out with super huge tits and dicks and unrealistic orgasms.

great story, please continue writing, for whatever category, just keep writing, great stuff!

...the ending, in fact, the complete story. I treasure brother/sister incest tales that end with deep love and marriage. HATE the ones that are macabre (death or abandonment, or unrealistically portrayed (foot-long dicks, large as a ball bat; 56 HHH mammary glands). You achieved the best combo, in IMHO. Please, more based on this genre. Thanks for the enjoyment.

Jim

I don't know why you always get the siblings married at the end of your story. I would like it if they just have a sexual relationship and not get married.

Shweta Parekh

as a man who has some incest fantasies, I can tell you that your stories in this particular field are some of the more well written ones that I have read.

You really know how to make your storie more of a love story than just a fuck story.

stupid unrealistic story no guy that had that done to him would willingly go help his sister and if his mom forced him to he sure wouldn't be so nice to her hewould ignore her as much as possible bring her her food and leave do as little as possible for her he sure wouldn't bathe her he would call as many of her friends as he could to get them to help so he could get away from her and he sure wouldn't talk to her or go looking through picture albums reminesing

about the good old days before she fucked up his life people especially family do not forgive like that they hold a grude keep it realistic sounding this isn't sci-fi

I appreciate how the joy between them came out as the tale progressed. Nicely done.

Jim Scouries - looks like you've done it once again - another great story - and I notice that the disenters can't even spell properly - so ignore them - they don't really know what they are talking about - It was great

With all of your stories. They are just so good. I don't usually read really long stories but yours are worth it :DD

I thought ur story was just amazing. The way brother and sister hate each other but then that brother is forced to be around her. I think it took to long 4 them 2 fell in love and that the sis should've remembered a long time ago that she promised her bro she would marry him. I also think that the end could've been better like after the mother accepted them being 2gether. It was confusin when the sis had the baby at a birthday and then come that she aint even have the baby yet. Next time make the endin more understandin and better that after the mom accepts, they actually have the weddin and consimate their marriage as husband and wife!!!!