by AnnaDreamer
You've captured my attention, I'll be interested to see where things go from here.
Good start, but it's a bit distracting having you change tenses from present to past.
Even though a chapter was recently added to this unfinished story; go watch/read Twilight, True Blood or Vampire Diaries if you want something like this.
If you're sick of stories like those, don't waste your time with this one.