All Comments on 'An Air Tight Fantasy Comes True'

there are quite a few mistakes (grammatically) in your story which makes the narration confusing:

"My voice trails off as I see you standing naked, robe open, wine glass in my hands."

there are more, but I'll spare you and the other readers.

don't get discouraged; there are lots of people willing to proof your stories; all you have to do is ask!